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Dione Lysithea Black

Submitted by: Anonymous

Reviewed by: thief_queen

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Fandom or Original Work: Harry Potter
I sure do love me some Harry Potter :)

Name: Dione Lysithea Black | her first name is a moon of Saturn and her middle name is a moon of Jupiter. Neither are very well know much like Dione feels.
It's very pretty!

Plot: This is mainly a fanfic that follows Dione and focuses on her relationship with James Potter | Dione's father was killed young leaving Dione to care for her sick mother alone. When she comes to Hogwarts she is sorted into Ravenclaw, a major disgrace towards the name of the Noble House of Black. Sirius, who is a year above her, understands what she's going through and takes her under his wing. She makes good friends with the Marauders and eventually forms a relationship with James Potter. While she does befriend the Marauders in no way is she actually a Marauder. In fact she disapproves of their pranks unless they're harmless. After Hogwarts she joins the Order in which she loses many of her friends and family | the rest comes in the sequel.
Ooo, interesting. And what is her relation to Sirius? Cousins? Second cousins?

Age: She's 11 in the first chapter or so but the book truly starts when she's 15
That's pretty common for a Harry Potter fic but it's pretty much necessary, so it's all good!

Race: White

Background: Her mother was Lucretia Black who had been ill since infantry. She marries Ignatius Prewett and with that comes along Dione. Dione is welcomed into the House of Black like anyone else but since the marriage of her uncle in her fathers side to a muggle and then his brutal murder their ties were cut off. Diones father was killed shortly after for being mistaken for his brother, t left Dione to take care of her sick mother until she went to Hogwarts. Diones mother dies around Diones second year.
Idk, it's pretty confusing to me. Why did she keep the last name Black if it was her mom who had the last name? And it's kinda strange that they'd mistake her father for his brother, even if they happened to be twins.

*Talents/Skills: Dione enjoys reading and funnily enough studying. Its because while she stayed by her mothers bedside it was the quietest and only thing she could do without leaving her mothers bedside.
That's pretty realistic for a Ravenclaw.

Sexuality: Straight

*Friends: She makes friends with the Marauders although she is no where near a marauder her self. She has two friends in Ravenclaw, Kyra Morris and William Louis
I AM SO GLAD SHE HAS FRIENDS OUTSIDE THE CANON WORLD.

Significant Other: James Potter (most likely) 

Appearance: Dione has black-brown hair that is straight and curls slightly at the end. Its very thick and hard to brush through and on bad days it can get frizzy. Her eyes are big and dark grey, a common Black feature. While she isn't ugly she doesn't get noticed compared to the rest of the Black family who's hairs sleek and shiny and have baby blue or bottle green eyes. She has a small amount of freckles on her nose. Her height is 5'7.5 in her adult years. And she weighs about 130 lbs.
I'm glad you kept her features realistic!

Distinguishing Features:  Freckles
Does she have a lot of them?

Habits: She bites her lips a lot when concentrating and when lying she always touches her hair which is something her friends pick up on.
Me: a terrible liar.

*Mental Illnesses: NA

Self-Confidence Level: She confident in her magical skills because the amount of time she reads her textbooks or spell books. Appearance-Wise she considers herself average as her skin still gets pimples and her hair still gets static.
I'm glad she's a generally confident person.

Ruled by Emotion/Logic or a Mix?: A mix, she's pretty quiet in class unless she's called on or wants to answer a question. She has been know to snap at her peers rarely when they are consistently interrupting or annoying her. She's a level-minded soul but can over think things. I would say 80% logic and 20% Emotion
Woah that's a pretty big difference, makes sense with the Ravenclaw aspect though.

Introvert or Extrovert: Introvert although when she opens up she can be rather witty

Strengths: A bright witch, is very caring towards her friends, ambitious and innovative

Weaknesses: She can put herself down very easily, can overwork herself, she's known to bundle up emotions and then let them all out at once.
ACTUALLY ME WITH THE BUNDLING EMOTIONS.

Constructive Criticism: Not too much on her character, just a bit on her backstory. The dead parents trope is commonly used (especially in the Harry Potter fandom, I've noticed) and in this sense it kind of seems a bit of a stretch. Maybe touch it up a bit or make it clearer?

Intrigue: 86%