Submitted by: dreamcatcher-belief
Reviewed by: thief_queen
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Name: Lily Luna Animosi
It's a cute name! Personally I don't like how it's Lily Luna but... if it's what you like, then go for it!Plot: aa sorry for not explaining this earlier. what I have planned so far is...
When Jake gets the opportunity to move from his small Florida town to a school in Oregon, he takes it. He'd always had powers, and (tba school name) was just the place for him. However, his roommate Lily seems to be set on keeping him away from his crush, a quiet girl named Autumn. As he learns to know Lily and her best friend, he discovers more and more about the school, Jake finds things that were probably better off hidden altogether. (This isn't perm and might change, if you have criticism, please tell me ;D;)
Ooo, I like the plot! And I live in a small Florida town too, so I can relate to him taking the chance to get away, I just don't know if Oregon would be the best place to move to, it's quite small compared to the larger cities in Florida, so maybe he moves to a big city there...?Race: American. Originally lived in New York before moving to the school.
Oh nice.Background: Lily was always a popular kid in school, due to her parents being rich, and always being a talkative person. When she was in first grade, she noticed she was able to see colorful clouds around people's heads. She thought it was normal, being a little kid. When she told her parents, they were confused, but soon figured out she had the power to see emotions, whether someone was having a good dream/nightmare, etc. In second grade, she found a boy crying in the hallway, unable to find his class. When he looked up, he yelled out "Dream girl!" and ran over, grabbing her arm, still crying. He eventually calmed down enough to tell Lily that he'd seen her in his dreams, turning out that he had dreams that could predict the future. The boy told Lily his name was Dave, and they eventually became friends, still being friends at the highschool.
I like this background! I like that you approached empathetic powers a bit differently than what is commonly used.Talents/Skills- kicking butt, ignoring people, hiding her feelings, being annoying, matchmaking people? kind of. (aka "HEY PERSON LIKES YOU DATE THEM" and calls it "speeding up the process.")
My only complaint with this one is that I personally feel as though ignoring people and annoying people kind of conflict, so I'd personally change that. But whatever works!Sexuality: Pansexual
Friends: Dave, a few people in the school
Significant other: She doesn't bother with that crap, she IS the matchmaker... for now :>
Lol.Distinguishing features: wears earrings a lot, often has on purple headphones- not little ones, full out gaming-mic-clunky headphones.
Aww cute.Habits: Talking to people, climbing the sycamore tree near the school, drawing (usually Pokemon.)
Mental Illnesses: None.
Self Confidence: 9/10.
Ooo, yes girl get that confidence!70% emotion, 30% logic. Does what she wants and won't let others stop her, even if it's stupid.
Me.About 90% extrovert. Social gurl.
I love social characters.Strengths: She can kick your butt. (black belt in karate) and kind-of good at getting what she wants, depending on what it is.
Weaknesses: She's not a very trusting person, and if she thinks it's "logical enough" she'll spread rumors/gossip about others. She doesn't keep many secrets, unless she's known the person for a while/trusts them. She's also a very loud person and annoys people a lot.
I am so glad she has some unattractive weaknesses like gossiping. Makes her very 3D.*she cant swim and only dave knows this.
*she has stage fright but tries to hide it.
Extra Notes: She has large sheets of paper taped to the walls of her room, which she draws on if it's late/she's bored. If it's day, she'll usually draw in a sketchbook. She then cuts out the drawings she likes more and pins them to a corkboard, causing the paper to usually be covered in rugged circle/square rips, since she's usually too impatient to cut out the drawing cleanly.
Constructive Criticism: Personally, I think she doesn't have too much that needs to be fixed, although I'm still not too fond of the Lily Luna thing... but whatever.
Intrigue: 84%
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