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Siofra Ní Chonaill

Submitted by: YonakaCastle

Reviewed by: thief_queen

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Fandom: Creepypasta - Original Story
Ooo, I'm excited to review this one! I haven't reviewed a Creepypasta before.

Name: Siofra Ní Chonaill (Changeling Child)
Unique name! I love it!

Age: 168 (died at age 10-11)
Dang, she died really young.

Race: Irish
Makes sense to me, the Irish have quite a lot of folktales. :)

Species: Ghost

Background: Siofra was born at a time in rural Ireland when people feared after 'changelings', babies believed to have been kidnapped and swapped out with fairy children. Due to the lack of understanding and information at the time, children with disabilities or deformations were often accused of being fairy children and killed. Siofra was blind, had motor difficulty and some problems with communication. Someone pointed the accusation of changeling at her and it wasn't long until the villagers had dragged her from her home and beaten her to death, then burning the body.
Kind of sounds like what happened to Bridget Cleary, almost.

She returned as a vengeful spirit, wishing the same kind of suffering demise upon the people who killed her.
Ooo, get it girl.

Skills: Can move through walls, become totally invisible, cannot be physically harmed, can possess people, all that ghosty stuff.
Acceptable.

Weaknesses: Cannot leave the boundaries of her village to give chase to victims that escape. Fire causes her to go into a trance of varying lengths, leaving people with halve a mind a chance to escape.
Hmm, good weakness! Maybe look into having iron as a weakness too, as I know that the Irish thought that would protect them from fairies and some more of the supernatural. I could be wrong, but it might be worth looking into.

Appearance: Siofra is a small, pale child. She wears a green, rough woolen shawl over a long brown dress and brown choppy hair. She has very pale, dull eyes due to her blindness in life. The visible skin on her face, neck and bare feet is covered in blood, dirt and bruising as well as tear marks on her face. Her clothing is dotted with scorch marks.
I like her appearance a lot.

Habits: Not many being a ghost, but she is often in a sort of half crouch.

Self-Confidence Level: Not really relevant to her story but I suppose around four in life.

Personality: In life her exact personality wasn't particularly clear, being so weak she had to spend most of her life indoors and was avoided by other children when she went out, but it's implied that she was very quiet and tried her best to avoid being in the way of people because of the way she was treated. In death she became highly bitter and malevolent towards the villagers who had killed her.

Ruled By: Emotion most definitely
Yeah I would be too if that happened to me.

Other: She cannot tell the difference between the villagers during her own time and their descendants, as time does not register with a ghost.
OH DANG. RIP THAT ENTIRE VILLAGE.

Constructive Criticism: Nothing, really. I'm really interested in her character.

Intrigue: 95%