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Evelyn Elizabeth Black

Submitted by: @proffesionalwitch

Reviewed by: thief_queen

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Fandom: Harry Potter (Harry's time period.)

Name: Evelyn Elizabeth Black.
Ooo, I love her name.

Plot:  Evelyn's time at Hogwarts, her relationship with her father and Harry, her having to become a fighter in a war.
I'm excited to see a relationship with Harry, haha, he's usually not everyone's favorite character to make a relationship with.

Age: Her age will range from 11 to 20 throughout the book and her late thirties in the epilogue.

Race: Caucasian

Background: Her mother, Andreya Prewett, is the younger sister of Molly (nèe Prewett) Weasley and Gideon and Fabian Weasley. She was in the same year as the Marauders at school and was friends with Lily (nèe Evans) Potter, Alice Longbottom and Marlene McKinnon. She and Sirius had always had a connection and in their sixth year began to develope a relationship. After graduation Hogwarts, they both joined the Order. At nineteen, Andreya feel pregnant with Evelyn and although not married, she was named Black after Sirius. They became engaged And had two happy years as a family until Sirius was blamed for the death of James and Lily. With most of her friends dead, or whereabouts unknown and Believing that Sirius was the cause; Andreya became very alone. She raised Evelyn in a two bedroom cottage near The Burrow. Initially, she didn't want to tell Evelyn about her father but Evelyn found a box beneath Andreya's bed that contained all the papers relating to Sirius and the Potter's deaths and found the engagement ring and photos of them and other memorabilia. Andreya explained it reluctantly to her and Evelyn has always had a complex of wanting to know her father but resenting him for having done something so evil.
Honestly, I'm pretty glad the she believes Sirius murdered the Potters, because it makes sense. Very interesting story so far!

Talents & Skills: Legilimency. (She was born with great aptitude for the skill, whereas most people have to study it. She uses it without malicious intent but gets scolded when she uses it without permission. She often verbally responded to people's thoughts, though sometimes by accident. When Harry was learning Occlumency, she was asked to help train him to repeal the attack of a Legilimens. She inherited it from her fathers side of the family; five generations back Aries Black was born with the skill and went on to use it as an aurora for the ministry of magic.)
Oooh, nice.

Art. (She is talented at drawing and painting and is often seen with paint of charcoal or led stains on her arms.)
My friends.

Potions. (She is very adept in potion making; she has both natural talent and love for the subject.)
BUT DOES SHE LIKE SNAPE????

Sexuality: Heterosexual.

Friends: Her cousins, Fred and George. (Their mothers - who are sisters - are close and live near by each other so they have been raised together. They are also within the same year at school so naturally they stick together.) Angelina Johnson. (Same house and dormitory and year group.) Alyssa Longbottom. (Same year  student who is the elder sister of Neville Longbottom.) Theodora Tonks. (Cousin and younger sister to Nymphadora. Same year student.) Connor Gold. (Student in the year above. Hufflepuff. Best friend to Cedric.)

Significant Other: Cedric Diggory. (Although she has a relationship with him and his death does effect her, her existence as a character does not revolve around this relationship.)
I'm glad it doesn't revolve around him :)

Appearance: Her appearance makes her look more like a Black than a Prewett. Some have said she resembles a younger version of her cousin Andromeda. Strong bone structure with high cheek bones and a defined jaw line. Slender straight nose. Large, almond shaped grey eyes. Dark brown, almost black hair that falls just above her waist that is often pulled back because she hates it down as it gets in the way.
Stereotypical Black haha.

Distinguishing Features: Scar above her right eye in the arch of her eyebrow. Scar bellow her chin. Scar on right forearm.
Do these scars have backstory?

Habits: Nail Biting and Picking At The Skin On Her Thumbs. (When she is nervous.)

Mental Illnesses: PTSD. (After the War.)

Self Confidence Level: She is confident with the subjects she is good at; potions, defence against the dark arts. But she lacks confidence when it comes things she knows she struggles with although she refuses to actually show her lack of confidence for fear being seen as weak.

Ruled By: 55% Logic and 45% Emotion.

Introvert or Extrovert: Overall an Extrovert but as the story progresses, she becomes much more introverted.
Makes sense with where the story goes.

Strengths: A natural leader, compassion, selflessness and unquestionable loyalty.

Weaknesses: Impulsivity, explosive temper when angered, mischievous.

Extra Notes: Extremely clumsy; she trips and falls a lot which is why she doesn't play Quidditch, despite loving it. Allergic to lily flowers. Drinks lots of tea; can only drink it when it's freshly boiled, never manages to finish a cup.
I hope these can relate to the story somehow.

Constructive Criticism: Not too much. My only concern would be a few of the extra notes where I'm not sure how they would contribute to the story without making it feel clunky. Be careful writing them in!

Intrigue: 88%