kpop book reviews

actions speak louder than words by @ilove_joon

ilove_joon thank you so much for requesting a review - I hope its helpful :)

⭐️ COVER ⭐️

3/5

I really like the picture of Yoonmin, and how it's slightly darker to indicate how the story deals with some darker themes like bullying and abuse. I'm not a big fan of the font used but that might just be a personal preference.

⭐️ DESCRIPTION ⭐️

3/5

It is very clear and definitely let's the reader know what the book is about, and I like the inclusion of the actual lines from the book because it makes a really nice link to the title. Some of the sentences are quite short, and while the first short sentences create a really nice effect, I think maybe instead of immediately telling the reader that the pair will be together you could hint at both of them having a crush on each other. That way the plot isn't exposed in the description.

⭐️ PLOT ⭐️

4/5

I really like the plot of the book - I read the whole thing in under an hour because I was enjoying it so much! I think you have a very interesting concept, and one of my favourite parts of the book is the fact that the bits in KSL are in bold because it gives Jimin a voice even though he's mute.

I am a bit of a sucker for college based fanfics so I did enjoy it a lot! I'm excited to see where the plot will go next :)

⭐️ WRITING ⭐️

3.5/5

I feel as though the writing got much more confident and detailed as the book progressed, and I love the humour in the book! The prologue seems a little rushed, and I think it could have been expanded on just so that it feels more authentic and we get a sense of how much this has affected Jimin.

I think having the multiple POVs works really well for this story because we get both sides to the relationship, but sometimes the POV swap can be a bit abrupt and sudden, so just make sure that when you're changing POV it's for a very obvious purpose.

But the writing is looking really promising!

⭐️ CHARACTERS ⭐️

4.5/5

I really loved reading about all the characters in the book, and I think they're all brilliantly hilarious and funny. Taekook are very funny by how little they care about whether they're caught doing naughty antics, I love how protective Namjin are. I especially like how Jimim brings out a softer side in Yoongi, and I think the pair are very well suited for each other.

⭐️ SPECIFIC POINTS ⭐️

You mentioned wanting to not use repetitive words and how to expand on the plot. A general point on plot is not to have too many filler chapters because they don't really add much to story, and it's much better to have an interesting but shorter story than one that's longer but has lots of filler parts. However, I think your idea to have chapters dedicated to different ships is interesting because I think some of the ships would be entertaining to see how they act together alone (especially Kihyun and Shownu)!

As for writing smut, it takes quite a lot practice to write it without cringing so don't worry if you feel like you're not doing it right at first! Try to focus on the emotional side of the smut as well as just the actions, especially when it comes to a character who has been abused before and someone who is not openly out - you have two very interesting characters, and their reaction to a sexual situation is worth taking some time to describe.

⭐️ OVERALL ⭐️

I really enjoyed reading this, and I think with a few tweaks it will run very smoothly. Writing description is something which just comes with practice, so continuing reading other fanfics and pick up some tips from them of techniques which work well.

Good job!

(if you want to ask about any of my points just PM me x)