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⭐️ COVER ⭐️
2/5
There is just too much going on in this cover to make it clear and easy to read. I like the idea behind the cover, but I think it could have been approached with much cleaner execution. The font isn't very easy to read and blends in with the background, and I think perhaps a simpler cover would work better.
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⭐️ DESCRIPTION ⭐️
2/5
While it builds up some suspense for the story, I think perhaps it lacks on any information about the plot itself. Maybe adding some rhetorical questions or a few lines about the plot would help to add some clarity to the book.
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⭐️ PLOT ⭐️
2.5/5
I thought your overall plot was interesting and I liked the flashbacks to Jungkook's past life. I also liked the vampire aspect although I thought you could have played around with that idea more. However, I felt like there were some parts of the plot that moved too quickly or weren't explained well enough. As well as this, it felt a little strange to have a flashback to 10,000 years ago that was set in a similar world to the present-day story just because the world changes a lot in that space of time.
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⭐️ WRITING ⭐️
2/5
I thought your first chapters flowed a lot better than your later ones because they juggled the dialogue and the writing much better. I think in general there was too much unnecessary speech that could have been broken up with description, and for me some of the chapters felt really fast-paced. Also, it's just a small pet peeve of mine, opening with Y/N waking up for school came across as quite cliché.
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⭐️ CHARACTERS ⭐️
3/5
I did like Y/N in sections of the story but I didn't feel like I got to know her properly throughout the book. Perhaps you could expand on her emotions and reactions to the situation around her. I liked the way you characterised the boys - especially Jungkook - because I thought this made them all really interesting.
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⭐️ SPECIFIC POINTS ⭐️
My overall piece of advice would be to cut down on the dialogue and look inside your characters. How are the feeling? What emotions are going through them? Dig deeper into them so that they can truly shine.
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