You mentioned in your form that you were looking to improve on your cover so if you want to PM more about this feel free to drop me a message! I like the picture you've chosen, but I think the writing isn't that easy to read and is positioned on the photo in a way that doesn't really work with the overall cover. It does immediately alert Jimin stans that this is a Jimin fic which is always a good thing!
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⭐️ DESCRIPTION ⭐️
3/5
I like that your description is very straight to the point and let's the reader know what the book is about. However, there are a few grammatical errors in it so maybe just iron those out. As well as this, maybe build up some suspense and mystery for the story which will entice readers. Potentially have a rhetorical question or a quote from the book which indicates that there will be emotional problems in the book.
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⭐️ PLOT ⭐️
3.5/5
I feel like the main part of the plot hasn't really started yet so I can't really judge it, but I like the fact that your main character and Jimin are best friends. They seem like they have a really great dynamic when they are together, and I think it will be really interesting to see what happens when they meet again.
I think you could make more of Lena's passion for writing and maybe have a few sections of description where she explains why she writes in the first place, and the way she views the world as an avid writer.
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⭐️ WRITING ⭐️
3/5
I think there were some really solid and interesting paragraphs of description which worked very well. I really liked the section which was her short story submission to her teacher, and I think having more descriptive passages would work very well.
There were some minor grammatical mistakes, so if you have time potentially go over your chapters and correct these just so the meaning flows better. As well as this, potentially expand more on the feelings of your characters and dig deeper into their emotions.
One small last point about writing - you don't need to describe exactly what your main characters are wearing. Unless it's relevant, I always tell people to just leave it out because it slows down the pace of the book.
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⭐️ CHARACTERS ⭐️
4/5
I like the fact that both Jimin and Lena have passions of their own which they want to pursue. I really enjoyed their interactions together and thought that the humour between them flowed very naturally and easily.
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⭐️ SPECIFIC POINTS ⭐️
My main point would be to just expand further on the emotions of your characters. I feel like sometimes you would show us how they were feeling by telling us directly, but try and show it subtly as well. Maybe Lena could write a short story about her emotions and her feelings of abandonment by Jimin.
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⭐️ OVERALL ⭐️
I think you have a solid base for a really great book, just keep expanding on your description and characterisation!
