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⭐️ COVER ⭐️
4/5
I really, really like the aesthetic of this cover because I think it conveys the soft tone of this book. I think perhaps you could have made the font slightly bolder just so it sticks out a little bit more, but overall I think it does look very pretty.
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⭐️ DESCRIPTION ⭐️
5/5
This description made me really excited to read this fic just because I love it when fanfics are slightly more poetic in their style - I think it adds a nice touch. You illuminate aspects of the plot without giving too much away, and in general I think it sets the tone well.
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⭐️ PLOT ⭐️
I don't really want to give this a rating because the book has literally just started but I like the premise of you book. I think their relationship has a lot of potential which you are already hinting to.
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⭐️ WRITING ⭐️
4/5
This was actually quite a hard one to rate. On the one hand, I think you do write beautifully and the metaphors about the petals falling into the chambers of Jungkook's heart was stunning. However, at points it did feel very much like I was being swamped with description and words. It felt like sometimes one adjective would have been enough to describe an object or a person, and occasionally your choice of words didn't fit the flow of the sentence. While I love the fact that you're taking this quite modernist, poetic style to writing, remember that you also need simplicity to make your imagery stand out.
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⭐️ CHARACTERS ⭐️
Again, seeing as the book has just started I don't feel like I know either character well enough to judge them yet. However, I do think you created a very natural chemistry between them which was evident even in the two chapters. I also loved that Jungkook was stargazing, I thought that was a beautiful touch which also aided characterisation really well given that it immediately told us that he was a dreamer.
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⭐️ SPECIFIC POINTS ⭐️
I agree with your concerns about losing the storyline in the description because I can see that potentially happening later in the book. I think you have to question the necessity of what you're writing - does the reader need to know the exact colour of one flower, or exactly what the sky looked like etc? Another piece of advice that I never thought I would give - maybe try adding more dialogue. I find that this can help break up description and work as a plot device to move things along.
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