Eating_Mochi thank you so much for requesting a review - I hope it's helpful!
⭐️ COVER ⭐️
2.5/5
Personally, I don't think this cover really does many favours for the book, and I think if you have gone for a more intense colour it would have matched the tone of the book more. I like the picture you've chosen to use because I think it does match the story, but I'm not a huge fan of the blue and purple background or the font you've put the quote in. I think for a more effective cover you could have chosen a darker colour scheme with bolder fonts to match the tone of the book.
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⭐️ DESCRIPTION ⭐️
4/5
I like your use of rhetorical questions in the description because I think it does capture the reader's attention and makes the question the notion of sin. I think potentially you could illuminate a little more on the overall premise of the book, but I think the conciseness does also work.
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⭐️ PLOT ⭐️
5/5
Now this was a ride. I loved the creativity of your plot and I thought you had such an original and exciting idea. I also liked how you linked each character to their sin, and it all felt very fitting (when I saw Jin was gluttony I chuckled for a solid two minutes). I think this is such a spectacular idea, and I really enjoyed seeing what each chapter held.
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⭐️ WRITING ⭐️
4.5/5
I thought you had a great mix between dialogue and description running throughout the book, and overall I think it really helped the story to flow well. Because it was a short story I understand that you couldn't go too far in depth with the character's feelings but I felt potentially with Jimin you could have explored his love a little more before he turned to his wrath.
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⭐️ CHARACTERS ⭐️
5/5
I loved what you did with all of them, and I think it was actually really nice to see a fic where they were all flawed because it felt like something I had never read before in any other fanfic. I think your characterisation of Namjoon was one of the most interesting ones in the book just because of how realistic it felt.
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⭐️ SPECIFIC POINTS ⭐️
As for your concerns about vividly imagining things, I think you did a very good job overall at conveying the story and keeping it interesting and creative.
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⭐️ OVERALL ⭐️
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this, and I think it's got such a great plot!
