I like the aesthetic of the cover and the simplicity of it. Personally I think the title could have been a little bigger just so it's more obvious and stands out more on the cover.
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⭐️ DESCRIPTION ⭐️
4/5
I really like the quote from the book because I think it sets the tone nicely, but there is a grammatical mistake in the second sentence where it says 'is she is' instead of 'and she is'. It's a small point but seeing as it's the first thing a reader will see you want to make a good first impression!
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⭐️ PLOT ⭐️
4.5/5
I really, really enjoyed reading this short story. The concept was so clever and exciting, and something I had never seen before so it was really interesting to read! I loved getting to know all the different personalities and seeing how they interacted with Min Jun!
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⭐️ WRITING ⭐️
3/5
I really liked how you characterised each personality through their dialogue, and all of the writing was really easy to follow. However, there were quite a few grammatical mistakes which sometimes stopped the flow of the writing, so maybe just go over a few chapters and edit them.
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⭐️ CHARACTERS ⭐️
5/5
I loved learning about all the characters in the book! It was my favourite part of the whole thing. My only feedback would be that I would have loved to see more of their personality come through, but I understand that it is a short story so couldn't be too detailed. A fun idea would be to have a character list at the end of the book listing all the personalities with a picture of Taehyung which best fits the character.
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⭐️ SPECIFIC POINTS ⭐️
While you asked for help with the flow of the story, I actually think it flowed nicely and meeting a new character every day worked really well. I also thought the development of their feelings for each other felt very natural.
I think perhaps you could have gone into more detail about Taehyung's past because that felt a bit glossed over. Maybe a prologue with a flashback of his past would help clear up some things for the reader.
My one point would be just to go over the chapters and edit out a few grammatical errors just because when a story is short these mistakes are made more obvious to a reader.
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⭐️ OVERALL ⭐️
I really enjoyed it and thought that you have a really creative concept which works really well!
