Nmjoonie94 thank you for requesting a review - I hope it's useful!
⭐️ COVER ⭐️
2/5
I like the picture you've chosen, but the font doesn't work with it to make a very eye catching cover. Especially the word 'boys' which gets lost in the background and therefore isn't very obvious. I think perhaps a different font and one colour with a shadow would look more effective.
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⭐️ DESCRIPTION ⭐️
2/5
While you cover the main premise of the book, it is really hard to read because of the fact that it's just one long sentence. Potentially a more effective description would cover less of the plot but instead build up suspense.
For example:
'I had the perfect life - great friends, an amazing family, and a boyfriend I loved with all my heart.
But everything is changed by a removal van in my driveway, a heartbreaking secret, and an annoyingly handsome badboy named Namjoon.'
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⭐️ PLOT ⭐️
3/5
I think you have a solid highschool au fic, but with a few tweaks you could make it an excellent fic. I think potentially you could have gone more into Yin-Ho's feelings about her boyfriend cheating on her because she seems to move on quite quickly. As well as this, I thought potentially you could have built up more tension between Namjoon and Yin-Ho before they ended up together because they had a really good enemies-lovers dynamic and so them getting together so quickly felt a little rushed.
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⭐️ WRITING ⭐️
2.5/5
While the writing did flow and made sense, there was definitely a lack of punctuation which hindered the story. I liked your use of dialogue and I thought that helped us get a real sense of the characters, but the grammatical mistakes did break up the flow of the story.
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⭐️ CHARACTERS ⭐️
3/5
I liked the character of Yin-Ho because she was sassy and interesting, but I think in the future you could develop her a little more so that she has some other character traits. I thought perhaps Namjoon's character was a little over-simplified, and so maybe in the future we could get a better sense of who he is as a person other than someone who calls people 'baby'.
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⭐️ OVERALL ⭐️
A promising start, and with some tweaks will be made great. I read that you were 11-12 and so I think you're doing a great job!
