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⭐️ COVER ⭐️
4.5/5
At first I didn't know how I felt about this cover, but it has really grown on me! I actually love the font you've used and I like the blocks of colour because it just creates a different dynamic for the cover which is really interesting and quirky.
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⭐️ DESCRIPTION ⭐️
4.5/5
Simple, funny, sums up the plot. It does all that a description really needs to do. I think it sets the tone well for the story.
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⭐️ PLOT ⭐️
4/5
I think this is a really fun idea. I like the fact that the chapters are quite short and the pace is quick because it keeps things exciting. I think potentially you could go further into Jungkook's feelings about rejection. I can tell that there are parts of the story unfolding now which sound very interesting, so just keep going!
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⭐️ WRITING ⭐️
4/5
I thought you had the tone and humour spot on for this type of book, and overall I read it with a smile on my face because the characters are really cute together. I think perhaps you could explain some parts more, especially their feelings for each other because at points it does seem a bit rushed, but as a whole I thought it was well written.
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⭐️ CHARACTERS ⭐️
5/5
I really liked the way you showed us the characters, and I think they both seem really sweet and charismatic. I like how they both have passions and interests outside of the relationship because it makes them feel like real people.
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⭐️ SPECIFIC POINTS ⭐️
You said that you weren't a fan of the writing and speech, but I personally liked it. I think perhaps with some of the dialogue you could make it a little more playful and natural. Maybe you could imagine the conversation in your head before writing it?
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⭐️ OVERALL ⭐️
I really want to go to McDonald's now, but other than that - a great story!
