milkteamirae thank you so much for requesting a review - I hope it is useful!
⭐️ COVER ⭐️
5/5
I really like this cover, I think it looks very professional. It screams 'aesthetic', and overall it makes the reader want to see what the book is about - especially because of the picture of Taehyung which implies that the book has the potential to be very sad.
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⭐️ DESCRIPTION ⭐️
4/5
I like the use of the quotes from the book to explain the rough plot, however I think you could have had a line at the end just to describe the overall premise of the book. This will let potential readers fully understand what the book is about, meaning they're more likely to read it.
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⭐️ PLOT ⭐️
5/5
I love the premise of this book! The catty back and forth between the two characters was so exciting to read, and I can't wait to see what you do between these characters. I also love the setting being in a hospital; it's something that I haven't seen a lot in BTS fanfic so it really makes you stand out as a writer.
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⭐️ WRITING ⭐️
4/5
I loved the way you wrote their dialogue and managed the characterise all the characters through the way they spoke. There were a few grammatical errors but these can be corrected with some editing, meaning that the writing will run smoothly.
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⭐️ CHARACTERS ⭐️
4.5/5
I was invested within the first few paragraphs of this book just because of the way your characters bounce off each other. The way you presented Hyunjae's confidence felt very natural and you really showcased her quick wit and sarcasm. What I loved even more was how Taehyung bounced off this confidence, and the interactions between them created so much tension and suspense.
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⭐️ SPECIFIC POINTS ⭐️
You said you felt your writing was bland, but I don't get this vibe at all. I really enjoyed your dialogue, and I thought the chapters were the right length to move the plot along. If you wanted to improve further, potentially you could develop Hyunjae by focusing on her other emotions other than frustration at everyone around her, and I expect this is what you're going to do later on in the book.
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⭐️ OVERALL ⭐️
I really enjoyed reading this and have definitely added it to my library. The way you create tension between Hyunjae and Taehyung is masterful, and I can't wait to see what happens next!
