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⭐️ COVER ⭐️
4/5
I really like the intensity of the cover as I think it matches the tone of the book really well. I also like the fact that the word 'heaven' is in red because it's implying that things are much darker than they seem! My only point was that the white text feels a little pushed together and so is hard to read until you look at the book closer.
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⭐️ DESCRIPTION ⭐️
5/5
I'm not usually too much of a fan of descriptions being excerpts from the book but I actually think this works so well. It's so intriguing and makes the reader want to find out how the main character has found themselves in that situation. It sets the tone for the book perfectly, and I think it works really well.
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⭐PLOT⭐️
3/5
Right from the beginning I thought the plot was so intriguing and exciting, and I haven't read many supernatural stories before so it seemed very exhilarating to me. I think you have such a solid plot but some of the backstories and events need more description just to make them clearer because there were moments where I was very confused.
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⭐️ WRITING ⭐️
3/5
I noticed a few small grammatical and spelling errors in a few chapters, so potentially go and read over some of them to edit. I thought potentially some of the paragraphs were lacking in description, so try and build upon the emotions of the characters in reaction to the events happening.
I really like the short sentences which are followed by a '...', I think those statements are really impactful and they add an aspect of mystery to the book.
Sometimes the changing of POV can feel a bit rushed and can make the chapters slightly confusing - 'Down Memory Lane' was just too full of different things happening and it got a bit difficult to follow. I also felt like a few chapters towards the end were dominated by too much dialogue so maybe break those bits up with some description.
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⭐️ CHARACTERS ⭐️
4/5
It took a while to get used to all the characters and what they were so maybe adding a character list at the start of the book stating what type of supernatural being they are would be a good idea. Overall, I liked all your characters and their development within the book!
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⭐️ SPECIFIC POINTS ⭐️
As for the writing side, I think you could go a bit deeper into the description of the book and focus less on having so much dialogue. I think the start of the book had really great description and a nice balance between description and dialogue, but this wasn't continued as much as the book went on. Just because some of the character's pasts are quite complicated - like Eva's and Namjoon's - maybe making their flashbacks into separate chapters would help clear up confusion and you could go into more depth about them.
I think my main point would be to not switch POV so much within chapters just because it can sometimes confuse the storyline.
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️ ⭐️ OVERALL ⭐️
I think you have a great idea and a really great plot, and so with some grammatical tweaking and more description I think it will run smoothly.
