Eating_Mochi thank you for requesting another review - I hope it's equally as helpful!
⭐️ COVER ⭐️
3.5/5
First off, I really like the changes you've made to all the covers by putting them on black backgrounds because I think it makes them look slightly more mysterious and intense. I also think the picture and the font work well together to convey the sentiment of the book. Personally I think the subtitle isn't necessary just because you say that in your description but that might just be my personal preference.
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⭐️ DESCRIPTION ⭐️
4/5
Simple, effective, and conveys the plot of the book. Potentially you could illuminate more on the situation Taehyung finds himself in, but I understand the need for mystery and suspense.
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⭐️ PLOT ⭐️
4/5
Clearly this story follows a slightly darker plot so I won't say I enjoyed reading all of the chapters, but I thought the plot was well thought out and gripping. You really managed to convey a sense of authenticity and I thought the way Taehyung reacted to the situation felt realistic. My only problem was with the ending, just because I feel like Taehyung's forgiveness is too quick and feels quite strange given the situation he was just in.
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⭐️ WRITING ⭐️
4.5/5
I didn't notice any grammatical errors so the writing flowed really nicely throughout the chapters. I thought you had a good mix of focusing on Taehyung's emotions and actual interactions with the kidnapper.
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⭐️ CHARACTERS ⭐️
4/5
I liked the way you portrayed Taehyung because I felt like you had a good mix of vulnerability and strength. I think you could have gone further with the characterisation of Jimin just so we could understand his motives more, but I understand that in a short story that can be hard to achieve.
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⭐️ SPECIFIC POINTS ⭐️
The ending was the main thing that felt a little off to me, just because it feels like quite a quick change. I feel like Taehyung should go through more emotional turmoil regarding the whole issue before coming to forgiveness just because of how much trauma we see him receive before.
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⭐️ OVERALL ⭐️
Interesting concept with good writing - but perhaps could expand a little more on the emotions of Jungkook and Jimin.
