Nemsaa thank you so much for requesting a review! I hope it's useful!
⭐️ COVER ⭐️
3/5
I really like what the cover is going for by having the text flow alongside the music, but I just think the grey on grey aesthetic doesn't really work and doesn't capture the eye. I think a cover that was slightly more exciting would help to draw people into checking out the book, because at the minute it feels quite flat.
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⭐️ DESCRIPTION ⭐️
4/5
I really liked the interaction you chose to put in the description because I think it had a really quirky comedic tone, whilst also setting out the premise of the book. It was simple but effective, and I squealed a little bit when I saw it was a Yoonmin fic because they're my fave ship!
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⭐️ PLOT ⭐
5/5
I was hooked from the first chapter! I think you have a really interesting dynamic between the two characters with a lot of room for them to grow, and I like how you gave us hints at the start that the pair will end up together because it builds up the suspense between them.
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⭐️ WRITING ⭐️
4/5
I thought your writing flowed really well, and you managed to capture the emotions and actions of the characters really clearly. My one piece of criticism is that Jimin's diary entries felt a little bit bland, and I personally thought his POVs were written better and gave us just as much insight into him as his diary entries did.
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⭐️ CHARACTERS ⭐️
4/5
I really liked your Yoongi and I thought he came across as very likeable. With Jimin I can tell you are building up to digging deeper into his emotions, and I think that when you do remember to slow your pace because you don't want to sound rushed when explaining why he is the way he is.
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⭐️ SPECIFIC POINTS ⭐️
I didn't think your lack of punctuation was that bad at all. I noticed it in a few places but it didn't hinder the overall flow of the story.
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⭐️ OVERALL ⭐️
It's early days, but I'm sure you've got a great story which will make my Yoonmin heart melt.
