kpop book reviews

choker by @cannibalrock

cannibalrock thank you for requesting a review - I hope you find it useful!

⭐️ COVER ⭐️

2/5

I understand that you're linking the cover to the multiple Jungkooks in the story but I think perhaps a much darker cover would work better. From my first impression of the cover I had no idea it would going to be a murder mystery fic, and so I think perhaps a more intense cover would work better.

⭐️ DESCRIPTION ⭐️

2.5/5

While I understand what effect you're going for with the questions, I think it comes across as a bit cheesy. Instead, you could use the same concept of rhetorical questions but have them about the story e.g. 'Who killed Namjoon and Jimin?' Etc.

⭐️ PLOT ⭐️

1.5/5

I really don't mean for this to come across as harsh but I was confused throughout the whole book. I think there are a lot of things that you clarify later on in the book but should be clarified at the beginning. Perhaps a cast list would be useful because I got so lost trying to remember who everyone was. I thought perhaps the pace could have been slowed down as well because there was so much happening in some chapters that it was difficult to keep up.

⭐️ WRITING ⭐️

2.5/5

I thought overall the writing was good, and I liked your use of dialogue throughout. However, I thought that perhaps some of the crack fic lines felt a little out of place in quite a serious book, and I also think you could have developed the descriptive sections a little more. As mentioned earlier, pacing was a little difficult to keep up with which was partially due to the changing of POV and so I would advise keeping the POV to one person per chapter.

⭐️ CHARACTERS ⭐️

3/5

I liked the way you built up mystery about each character, and how every character can be classed as a suspect. I think perhaps we didn't really get to see the personality of any of the characters other than Y/N, and so it would be nice to just expand upon the characters themselves as well as the central plot.

⭐️ SPECIFIC POINTS ⭐️

I think the main two things I would focus on in order to add clarity to the book would be:
- slow down
- explain.

Things are happening very quickly and I think if you slowed down a little it would make the book a lot easier to understand and help build up suspense. I think the later chapters explaining the backgrounds of the characters have been useful, but perhaps the earlier chapters could use some explanation as well.

⭐️ OVERALL ⭐️

A promising idea, and with some tweaks I'm sure it will be great!