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Markus Bellington

Fandom: Original (trying to sell this idea)

Occupation: Politician (the word politician changed)

Gender: Male

Age: 32

Sexuality: Asexual. Married to the job.

Appearance: An older version of young Walt Disney, if that made sense.

He grew a painter's mustache and wears a tie and furry coat that many think was made from an old mat.

Personality: A man that you could keep your food warm when you're near him, but behind closed doors he is a different man with different ambitions than the next man.

Family:

Carla Alberdale (mother)

Paul Bellington (deceased)

Edward Alberdale (step-father)

Bio: Born in a house of a teacher and a bank teller Markus would be met with a plateful of pie and a mouthful of soap when he would do something bad.

Growing up and following his father's footsteps by taking the same schools he took until he was choosing a college, during that time his father was killed in a bank robbery gone wrong and Markus took up the politics in a new university.

Obtaining with his masters and hearing that he had stepfather that went fishing with him on his free time, life seemingly went fine. That was until ReadAbout took over.

At first he supported ReadAbout but when they did a government takeover, affiliations changed, but because they were in need of puppets, they gave him a new office in the Big Tower, a place only the most important people worked, and he was forced to advocate them.

But nobody is looking in his direction, he looks upon others.

Affiliations: The Printing Press, The People, and The Politicians.

Crimes: Fraud- 5 years after writing satire (your luxury depends on how many people read your books)

Strengths: He has many favors in his hands and plays with the boys that have strings on them.

Weaknesses: A bad liar and one day people will find out about his secrets. Also, rational fear of heights.

The story idea is great, and I hope you end up writing it on Wattpad.
As for your character, there were a couple minor things I'd like to point out.

Markus doesn't appear to be affected much by his father's death, so I'm assuming he either wasn't close to him or isn't affected much by deaths in the first place. And if either are true, you should make sure to incorporate that.

Secondly, he could use a couple more strengths and weaknesses to make him appear more realistic.

The last thing I'd like to point out is his sexuality. You said he was Asexual, but then continued with he was married to his job. But asexual just means a person has no sexual interest. They don't have a problem with marriage.
So did you mean aromantic? Or was it just a mix up of words?

Besides that, your character appeared fine. His bio is great and for the most part I didn't mind his strengths and weaknesses. The entire idea is what really got me hooked, and it'll be interesting to see how his story plays out.

7/10.

Again, just a couple things need brushing I up on and the rest is all good.

Also, @city_of_fae , I will have your review done by tomorrow. Sorry for taking so long.

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