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Angelica Riverton

This is And_I_Care_Why 's OC.

Fandom: Original

Nicknames: None, nicknames have a tendency to annoy her and she sees them as a sign of disrespect. However, her title is Princess Angelica Riverton of Caeruleum.

Age: 17-18 (17 for some of the book, 18 for the rest)

Appearance: Angelica's hair is cut into a messy dark brown pixie cut, due to the fact that her father believes that having long hair would get in her way during combat. She has one dark brown eye, but the other one is missing because of an accident with her sword, which also caused her to have a long scar on her eye (or where her eye used to be). She has pale skin, due to genetics (all the women in her family have pale skin). Angelica has quite a few scars and bruises on her arms and legs. When she's training in combat, she wears a pair of combat boots with baggy jeans tucked into them and a loose fitting shirt, along with her sword (which she carries in her right hand, causing it to be a bit stronger than her left because the sword is very heavy). When she is out in public, she covers all her bruises and scars with concealer, brushes her hair neatly, and wears a red 17th century style dress with red heels.

Gender: Female

Sexuality: (Secretly) Homosexual

Love interest: Alice Lauren's

Personality: Despite being a princess, Angelica can be a huge bitch. She always states her opinions, even if they are rude and hurtful. She is extremely impulsive and acts immediately, rather than thinking over the consequences of her actions. She doesn't have many people that could actually say she cares about, but she would protect those she does with her life. Angelica is the type of person who will bring a gun to a knife fight. She never plays fair, she plays to win. Angelica has a hard time showing her emotions and opening up to other people because her father showed it as a sign of weakness.

Ethnicity: American

Nationality: Caeruleum (original nationality)

Likes: Combat, people she can trust, her sword, learning about the history of her kingdom, winning fights, being able to trust people

Dislikes: When people don't answer her questions fast enough, being bossed around, when people lie to her, naive people, idiotic people, being told to calm down, losing

Yo! For starters, I want to give you a thumbs up on the originality. I can tell you worked hard on her personality. Not many people would dare to describe their character as a bitch. And her nationality is seriously cool. I haven't seen many modern day stories with made up realistic kingdoms. You gave her some very well done physical flaws, and I love that she's a secret homosexual.

However, I don't see how her Ethnicity is American while her nationality is a different country. Elaborate this when it comes to the back story. And don't make your character too negative. It's good to have flaws in the personality, but make sure to add in a near equal amount of perks, too! Also, why is her being a homosexual a secret? Is it frowned upon? Or does she not want to admit it to herself?

8/10.

Most problems I had were questions that will probably be answered in the story and if that's the case, then pay no mind to them whatsoever. Aside from that, you did a good job with the originality.

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