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Camryn Blood

This is AWeirdAssKid 's OC.

Fandom: Original. She's from a show I want to create in the future.

Nickname: Cam (she goes by that)

Appearance: above ((edgy I know))

Sexuality: Bisexual

Crush: A boy named Mason

Species: Half vampire, half wizard (doesn't know about the wizard part)

Positive Traits: She's very nice and friendly even if you don't know her. She's also smart.

Flaws: She doesn't open up easily and doesn't talk much. She's also emo so kids don't really talk to her because of that.

Hobbies: Drawing, making stories/songs, and hanging out with the friends she has.

Background: Her mother cheated on her so-called father with a wizard. Her mother's a vampire and her real father was a wizard. She's the youngest in her family being 11. Cam has two older brothers named Zach and Nick. Can has two older friends who she doesn't know are her siblings. She goes to a school called Wayward Lake Middle and does good in it.

Extra:  In this universe Vampires, Wizards, and Werewolves exist. They're called Aranors (short for Paranormals) and the most populated place with them is a small town called Wayward Lake, TX.

Cam's world, though a topic I generally find, sounds pretty cool. Who WOULDN'T want to live in a place with Werewolves, Vampires, and Wizards???
But in all seriousness, there were a couple things about Cam that could be touched up on.

Add a few more traits.
All I know about her is that she's smart, nice, quiet, and doesn't open up much, which sounds a lot like every other girl. Throw in some things that make her stand out, like she's afraid of trees or the number 13 or that she's fierce.

Y'know, something to make her interesting.

Along with that, there's the issue with her being emo. I , for one, don't care WHAT your label is or what group you supposedly fall in. I'm friends with 'em all.
That includes a few emos, and from what I know about them in my school, they're not avoided. 'Course my school believes in southern hospitality and we're all nice to each other anyways, but....

ANYWHO. Getting off topic here. What I'm trying to say is not everyone avoids emos. Maybe if she's completely antisocial and refuses to talk to anyone new.

Another thing about being emo– this better not be the girl classified as emo due to the marks on her skin.
K? K.

Other Cliche's I found: Her last name being "blood" and her being an emo vampire.
Like with all cliches, be careful using them. They could make your story a great success or a big pile of trash.

Besides that, I thought your character was fine. The age is a bit cliche, but that's all right. Not everyone can write adult characters.
She doesn't know the truth about her or her family history and I bet that comes out in some great plot twist at some point.
Her hobbies are nice and there are quite a few of them.
And her backstory is reasonable.

7/10

Again, a few cliche's, a few major things that needed to be brushed up on, but overall I liked your character.
Good luck on that show!

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