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Maisie Castell

This is calmwolf 's OC.

Fandom: Original

Nickname: Z or Zee

Age: 16-18

Appearance: Maisie is 5 feet 3 inches, with slightly wavy brown hair. She has bluish hazel eyes, and can normally be found in a regular t-shirt and pants. She has scars on her wrist from being held captive and the chains constantly digging into her. She has other small scars and marks from various fights.

Sexuality: Straight

Crush/relationship: (Disclosed because it hasn't been revealed in the story.)

Species: Werewolf/shifter

Illness or disease: In the start she has muscle atrophy. In the middle of the book she suffers from PTSD (trauma), night terrors, and mild depression. In the end she still suffers from those, but more minorly and she has coping methods to deal with her symptoms.

Reason for said illness or disease: She was held captive in a small cell for a few years without much space to move, that caused the muscle atrophy. She was kidnapped twice, the first time for a few years and the second for a few months, she watched two of her friends die, she's been on the run since she was young, both times when kidnapped she has been tortured, and saw her parents die.

Positive traits:
Determined-If she really wants something, she will find a way to get it done
Strategic- She will always think out what way will be the best
Loyal- She will always be there for those she cares about (loyal to a fault)
Strong/independent–She can hold her own and doesn't need to lean on people often. She is able to stand up without others supporting her if she believes it's for the best.

Flaws:
Untrusting- she has been let down and hurt by many people, she is scared to trust in fear of them and herself getting hurt

Cold- she is like this because she is scared to trust, so sometimes it's easier to act cold than to get close and be hurt

Strong/Independent- While being strong and independent may be good as well it is one of her major flaws. She sometimes thinks she can do everything on her own (which is not the case).

Hobbies: Reading, running, scrap booking, baking lemon squares, training (fighting/defense/tracking), and doing puzzles (sudoku, mazes, etc)

Family:
-(Skyler) Mother: Dead
-(Oakley) Father: Dead
-(Ace) Brother-like-figure: Alive

Other: She does have a power, but she can't use it to harm others, it's meant as a defense only. She doesn't use it much and relies more on her own body and her scythe (she only learns to use a scythe in the middle of the book). She makes a bunch of friends on her journey, they help her rediscover her will to live, work through her PTSD (etc.), and fight with her in the final battle.

Cause of death: (Disclosed for it will be revealed later in the series) But I will say she doesn't die in vain.

Coolio! Let's do this.

Right off the bat, I love her appearance and her nicknames. The scars are a very nice touch. Her age range is a bit iffy, mainly because this is a common Sue age, but I will not be taking off points for this.
You did very well when inputting the mental illness and the other problems she had. I really liked the muscle atrophy part. It gives her a touch of originality and she has a realistic reason as to why she has it.
The traits are balanced fine and the fact that her independent nature is both a flaw and a perk is a major plus.
And while powers are often considered cliche, you did a good job making sure she wasn't overpowered.

I honestly didn't have much to complain about.
My only question is how her shapeshifting effects her. Not in fights, but just in day-to-day life. Does she ever lose control of it? Does her muscle atrophy have any significant effect on it?

Details are always important when it comes to powers, and for the most part you got it down.

9.5/10.

Keep up the great work!

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