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Aurora Sky

I'm going to do something I've never done for a character review. Okay? Cool.

SadiaRiaz4 , I'm not the greatest writer out there, but if you want to learn anything out of this when making characters, remember this.

Try to make your characters differentiate from each other. It's okay to add parts of yourself to your characters and its even okay to have author inserts. But at the very least, also try to make your characters have separate personalities, especially your main characters. I noticed from the three OCs you gave me that their personalities were nearly exactly the same. They were blunt, sarcastic, and not exactly the best when it came to being social. They had a tough outer shell, but a kinder inside that they didn't often show. It was like I was reviewing the same character three times, just fixed a little for the sake of whatever fandom it was a part of.
I didn't count off for this for any of the reviews I did. I just wanted to put this note in as a sort of warning or tip.
That being said..let's do this bijizzle.

Nickname: Aura

Fandom: Pokemon

Age: 10

Hometown: Littleroot Town, Hoenn

Occupation: Trainer/coordinator

Appearance: Aura has blonde hair and green eyes. She normally wears a blue knee-length skirt with tights, a white shirt with a blue string tie and brown boots. Aura ties her hair in a bun via blue ribbon.

Personality: Aura is smart and resourceful. She is a good trainer and friend to her Pokemon. Aura never gives up in any kind of situation, although her faith still wavers from time to time. She can be pretty blunt and brutally honest, which gets her in trouble and leads people to view her as cold and insensitive. She is also a bit sarcastic sometimes, especially when asked stupid questions. She is courageous to the point of stupidity and determined. She is loyal, independent, and reserved. Although she gets agitated easily, deep down Aura is kind and gentle, a side she shows to very few. Aura is serious and cannot be deterred by others once she sets her mind to something. However, she tends to get a bit distracted from training in cities, preferring to enjoy the new sights she gets to see. Aura can be a bit of a perfectionist at times, especially in her opinion of others.

Likes: Pokemon, contests, battling, performances, sightseeing.

Enjoys: Travelling, camping, performing, battling, training, cooking, spending time with her Pokemon.

Dislikes: Girly girls (she just can't stand them), happy-go-lucky people (she finds them a bit unreasonable and childish), bullies (she finds them low and pathetic), arrogant trainers (she finds them highly annoying)

Dream: To be the top coordinator

Positive attributes: Helpful (to some), kind (to some), smart, resourceful

Negative attributes: Blunt, sarcastic (sometimes), perfectionist, short tempered

Fears: Abandonment, not being able to live up to people's expectations.

Pokemon:
-Eevee-->Espeon (Eon): Female, starter
-Azurill-->Marill (Bubbles): Female
-Beautifly (Alae meaning "wings"): Female
-Minun (Yin): Male
-Plusle (Yang): Male
-Dragonair (Aliana): Female
-Absol (Eclipse): Male
-Feebas-->Milotic (Mystic): Female
-Togepi (Angel): Female

Backstory: Aura had a normal childhood with its normal ups and downs.

Good habits: Hard worker, polite and respectful to adults.

Bad habits: Deep sleeper, snappish when woken up early

Character Relations:
-Emily (OC): Emily and Aura are friendly rivals. Emily, being an experienced coordinator, helps Aura become better and grow as a trainer and person. The two share a close bond and keep in touch when away. Emily comforts Aura when she loses her contest to her. However, the two tend to get competitive in contests. Emily is very supportive of Aura and vice versa.

-May: Aura and May do not like each other in the beginning. The two meet in a summer camp when they are little. Aura takes an immediate dislike to May's girlish tendencies and May dislikes Aura's seemingly rude personality. During their journeys, May and Aura meet in Petalburg Woods along with the rest of May's friends. The two are determined to catch a Pokemon, leading to further bickering. Throughout their journeys, Aura makes blunt comments about May's less progress than her, which is just to rile her up. In contests, the two are competitive rivals, both trying to best each other. In Emily's words, they act like "little children trying to show up each other". After the Grand Festival the two reach a sort of understanding, though neither will admit it.

Drew: Aura and Drew first meet up in the Slateport contest, though he already knows about her through her victory in the Rustboro contest. The two are rather neutral, only competitive when pitted against each other. Drew, however, does admit that he admires her style of performance.

-Ash: Aura and Ash don't interact too much. However, Ash compliments her performances from time to time and Aura acknowledges his potential as a trainer.

-Harley: Aura and Harley barely interact, especially since the former tends to avoid him. She meets him in the Dewford Town contest and sees right through his nice acting. The two do not warm up to each other.

Robert: Robert and Aura are rivals but do not interact much out of contests.

As usual, let's start out with what alarmed me.
WARNING: OC/Canon relationships of ANY sort, be it romantic, platonic, or rivalry, is considered a cliche and can harm your story rather than help it. So BE CAREFUL.
Her likes and dislikes seem to be centered solely on her position as a coordinator. Not necessarily a bad thing, but doesn't make her very realistic.
The Pokemon Togepi. I'm not all too familiar with the Pokemon cartoon, especially not the recent one, but I'm pretty sure Togepi is really hard to get. I wasn't even aware you COULD catch it in Hoenn until I looked it up. It's not like in Soul Silver and Heart Gold, where the Professor just gives it away, and even if it was, that doesn't sound like it goes along with her back story very well.
Of course, I could be wrong and the cartoon is completely different from the game and there's a legitimate reason as to why your character somehow managed to catch a supposedly hard to acquire Pokemon.
But aside from all that, she was a decent character.
She's not accepted immediately by Canons and she's not overly friendly or unfriendly to them. Sometimes I'll see fan characters who radiate flipping sparkles and act like they crap rainbows every time a Canon enters the scene, save for maybe that one Canon who the author hates. You didn't do this in the slightest, so nice job.
She has a nice set of traits. Not too negative, but not too amazing either. She has a relatable personality.

8/10.

Overall, she wasn't too shabby of a character. Nice job.

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