Let's Talk Fanfiction!! {Closed}

Babi

Nickname: Bab (given by friend), Princess (given by father), Twinkle toes (given by mother), and Kitten (given by boyfriend).

Appearance: Above

Sexuality: Straight

Relationship: Ashton (a lynx, 19 and currently alive, also my boyfriend's OC)

Species: Cat

Positive Traits: Creative, energetic, forgiving, kind

Flaws: Sensitive, naive, annoying, taken advantage of easily.

Hobbies: Dancing and theater

Backstory: It's under development, but she was a normal furry interested in Broadway. She did ballet and two dance classes, while her mother joined the military and her dad was a tow truck driver. Her mom died in a terrorist attack before Babi went to high school, leaving her and her father.

....this entire time I thought she was an actual cat.
Like I had this long list of what I saw wrong and then you said "furry" and I had to stop and reread the entire thing.

Okay then.....moment of awkwardness aside, let's get to the reviewing.

She seems like a normal teen/furry. I mean, besides the fact that there's no yiffing mentioned (which I'm glad you did.)

Her appearance is nice. Good work on it!

That is a LOT of nicknames and I especially love the one her mom gave her. It wasn't the generic nickname a parent would give.
I like how her traits link with one another. For instance, how she's naive and energetic, and I assume that's why she's annoying.

Her mother's death is a little vague, though. She joined the military, she died of a terrorist attack....
How? What part of the military? Did this have any effect on Babi at all?

And about her being taken advantage easily, does that become a conflict in her relationships?

You didn't give an age and I'd add more to the personality. What's her likes? Her dislikes? Does she dream of becoming a star on Broadway? Or does she just really like dancing and singing?
Or does she dream of being a tow truck driver who gives mini concerts to the drivers she picks up?

6/10.

There's my take on her. I know you said she was a work in progress, so I hope this helped!