Scroll 2: The Third Uchiha [Naruto]

Edits

Hello! 

This is mainly for those who have already read all of Scroll 2 prior to December 29, 2020. 

If you are a new reader then feel free to move on to Scroll 3! ALSO if you're new here and don't want spoilers for scrolls 3 & 4 please skip this and go straight to Scroll 3. 

For now, I have toned down Rin & Kakashi's relationship, especially any "intimacy". I removed all the I love you's which means their big confession will now happen in Scroll 4. So that edit will be coming shortly. 

I will also be going through Scroll 3 but I don't think much if anything will need to change there. 

I hope this makes it a little more bearable/readable and also doesn't hurt the overall story as it is now.

You might be thinking why didn't I take more drastic measures? To continue being honest with you all I didn't want to undertake a massive revision and not complete it. This is what I have the energy to do for now and I see it as a little compromise so Scroll 2 can stay up while I figure out what's next. So, I hope the small changes are well received and I really hope I haven't somehow made it worse. 

I just wanted to provide you with a list of the most edited/altered chapters and a very brief line on what was taken out if you want to check it out again. 

CH 15 - The over the mask kiss before entering the exam room was switched to a cheek kiss. So the first kiss is no longer here. 

CH 23 - Took out the "sorry can't kiss you here" teasing when they reunite at the preliminary matches. 

CH 26 - Kakashi and Suki's conversation was changed from loving Rin to feeling "something". To keep it more open-ended. 

CH 27 - Took out Kakashi's love confession and toned down the kiss. 

CH 28 - Took out the first kiss, kept the photo scandal with the now forehead kiss. 

CH 29 - Instead of being certain about love the Hokage questions if Rin even knows what love is. 

CH 31 - Took out Sasuke asking if Kakashi loves Rin, took our Kakashi saying he promises to love Rin. 

CH 32 - Took out all the I love you's and a kiss, changed it to a chat about love and what's next. Would still be the start of the relationship. 

CH 42 -  After Rin kisses Naruto's cheek as a thank you, I changed my heart still belongs to Kakashi to I'm still with Kakashi. 

CH 44 - Took out the I love you's from the hospital visit. 

CH 48 - Took out the I love you's when they separate for mission assignments, also changed the kiss but this would now be the first kiss instead of CH 15. 

CH 51 - Toned down the jealousy with Shikamaru, and toned down the kiss at the end of the chapter. 

CH 57 - Finally removed Kakashi calling Rin "honey" lol 

CH 66 - Took out the baby talk, changed up the marriage talk. Toned down the kiss and took out some kissing. This is chapter is now the first mention of "love". 

CH 69 - changed up the break up at the end of the chapter. 

I think some of these changes work a little better. So I hope those of you that have already read this still like it with the changes. 

I don't think I missed anything but please comment if I did!