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I hope to return to this project someday, but it isn't feasible with my current health issues and life circumstances. I have to cut things from my workload so I can breathe. However, I still intend to complete my current li...
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First impressions: 31/40
Title: 10/10
This is a great title for a time travel book. I like the concept of connecting timelines and individual stories that would otherwise never directly touch, so this intrigues me right away.
Story description: 8/10
Normally, I don't like story excerpts at the beginning of a blurb. There's very limited character space in the blurb preview, so maximizing every character is important. But this is exactly the kind of quote that can hook people in an instant, because it's just so off-the-wall. "So" should be capitalized, though, and you don't need all the extra space between that quote and the section divider for the actual blurb, since that's what the section divider is for.
Moving on to the blurb, the second sentence is basically the first sentence with more detail, so I'd cut the first sentence entirely. There should be commas on either side of "Taehyung," and instead of a semicolon, I'd use a period for a hard stop, because that adds more punch to each sentence, increasing the hook.
And that's about it. Short, sweet, and to the point. You introduce the protagonists and the plot conflict, leaving the details vague enough to pique a potential reader's curiosity without giving too much away, and ending with a series of questions is a very effective way to hook someone into the story. And I can't wait to reach the point where that story excerpt actually happens.
Cover: 8/10
Overall, I like this cover (kudos to Yeontanaaaaaaa for designing it). The imagery all blends really well, and the compass behind the golden glow adds a layer of complexity that isn't evident at first glance. I like the font style, size, and placement of the title, but I think it could be brought out a little more from the golden glow, because I honestly didn't even notice it until I started analyzing the cover. Maybe some sort of border around the letters would help? Something that blends with the golds but is just different enough to add an edge that defines the letters more? It's something to look at, anyway.
As for your name and the graphics credit at the bottom, that text is way too small, and I can't even make out the username for the graphics designer when I click on your book from your profile to pull up a larger image of the cover. Part of that is the coloring, because some letters fade into the background too much. So, I'd bump the size up for both lines and brighten the graphics designer's line to ensure they get the credit they deserve.
