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I hope to return to this project someday, but it isn't feasible with my current health issues and life circumstances. I have to cut things from my workload so I can breathe. However, I still intend to complete my current li...
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Result: 82/100
Blurb: 3/5
I don't really like quotes or book excerpts splitting up a blurb (or in a blurb at all), so I'd move those down below "It's another story." When you have a prospective reader clicking on the book title and bringing up that pop-up box, they don't see the full text of the blurb, so every bit they do see needs to count.
As far as editing suggestions, the line with "this is not" repeated twice should have a semicolon or a period instead of a comma, and the following line with "It's another story" should end with a period. For the first quote, the second "not" should be all lowercase, and "that I will" should be "will I." Starting that line with a hyphen and ending with a tilde (~) feels weird, too. I'd probably replace the tilde with an ellipsis (...) to give the trailing off effect I think you want.
But, content-wise, this has a nice, mysterious feel to it, almost ethereal, and I'm down for a retelling of the Titanic, so bring it on!
Creativity & Practicality: 5/5
Well, excluding the images you created, this is definitely creative, and we won't even talk about the talent needed to make those images, or my latent jealousy. I would never have thought to merge the Titanic with BTS. You've definitely taken some liberties, as I would expect from a fanfiction, so things that would impact practicality don't really mean as much here. What I mean by that is historical accuracy. Out of curiosity, I was Googling things as the story progressed, because there were a lot of things I was sure didn't exist at the time of the Titanic, and I was right. It wouldn't be a bad idea to stick a note at the beginning that you're not going for historical accuracy here.
