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I hope to return to this project someday, but it isn't feasible with my current health issues and life circumstances. I have to cut things from my workload so I can breathe. However, I still intend to complete my current li...
Source: Review Shop by TheBlossomCommunity_ Genre: Fanfiction Subgenre: Romance Fandom: BTS Mature: Y (explicit sexual content, moderate swearing, strong swearing) LGBTQIAP+: G (brief jokes) Status: Complete First impressions: 22/40 Digging deeper: 30/100 Final thoughts: Complete Note: Chapter 34 was the last available chapter as of the publishing of this review.
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First impressions: 22/40
Title: 10/10
Ooh, a secret romance, and you're using French. My silly inner romantic is practically squealing already. 😊
Blurb/synopsis: 4/10
This doesn't feel like a story description. It's more of a generalized thought about first love. That doesn't mean this paragraph is bad, and I think it can stay as your first paragraph, but there needs to be some character introduction and at least a brief glimpse of the plot conflict, which you could add as a second paragraph. Then, I'd move the very last line up to the end of the blurb proper, and separate the quotes from the blurb at the bottom. For help writing the informative section, I'd recommend checking out justwriteit's chapter on writing a story logline and pitch for a little advice. I'll post the link in the inline comments here. →
Grammatically, there's a missing "a" in the third sentence of the first paragraph that should go right before "young first love." The first quote doesn't need a comma, and there are some issues with the punctuation and capitalization of the quote within a quote for the second line. There should be a closing single quotation mark at the end to pair with the opening single quotation mark, capitalize the first word like normal dialogue, and add a period to end it all: 'That's the one.'" For the very last line, you don't need "with," and "craziness" is misspelled.
But even without an introduction to the plot, I'm down for some cutesy romance, and I already have a V playlist going in the background to set the mood. 😉
Cover: 6/10
I like this, but it could be better. And my graphics skills aren't good enough to do what I would want. I love the two images, but if there was a way you could blend them together better, so he's looking at her, and she's standing in front of him, that would be ideal. I don't know how you would do that, though. It just looks like that's what should be going on here, but it's two different pictures put together, and the vertical line splitting the cover in two and blending them together isn't quite right. Maybe find a way so his forehead isn't cut off, and her shoulder isn't cut off? That would blend the top of his image and the bottom of her image together better.
