Hi!
Okay guys. Yes, I realize that I've sorta been on a poetry streak. I swear that this is the last one!
Anyway, there is this poetry contest, and I'm thinking of entering. I would've entered my first poem I showed you (by the way, I ended up calling it 'Her Day'), but the problem is, in order to enter into the contest, the poem has to be twenty lines or less.
So, I've had this idea for a poem for a while now, and I decided to write it last night.
Can I please have your input on it? Can you please tell me if anything is a little odd or off? Thanks, I would really appreciate it.
Well, here goes nothing:
WHEN THE STARDUST FALLS
The stardust falls and
Lands on her face...
Trickles into her eyes and
Covers them with darkness -
Until all she can see are lustering galaxies and stars.
The stardust falls and
Lands on her shoulders...
Cascades into her hands and
Fills them with magic -
Until all she can feel is the radiance in her hands.
The stardust falls and
Lands in her bones...
Perches in her soul and
Settles in her heart -
Until she is infused with luminescence.
When the stardust falls and
Lands on her face...
Trickles into her eyes and
Covers them with darkness -
She is nothing but the light of the world.
(End of poem)
Okay. So is there anything you guys would change? Is there anything that doesn't sound quite right? I would really appreciate any feedback you guys would have.
Well, thanks for reading!
Bye guys!
Toodles!
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