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It is too common for a title, won't attract many people. Try using a different title that connects the story. For example "Black Romance."
✯ Cover: 3/5
Quite plain, add some editing and know that the glimpse of the cover is the first impression.
✯ Description: 6/10
Please give a proper blurb cause the cover, description, and title make the first impression. You can add dialogue from the chapters itself but remember suspense and thriller dialogues are the key.
✯ Protagonist usage: 4/5
Good enough, but would love to read the insight of Jungkook's life.
✯ Plot: 5/10
I'm sorry to say, but it is very common, the cold mafia vibes person who you love, and he has a girlfriend, but you still love him and forget about someone who did love you. These all are pretty common. Try adding some suspense that makes it unique.
✯ Flow: 16/20
Kind of shaky, try to not end a chapter with no cliffhanger and make them connected. Adding cliffhangers will make a reader feel intruded on.
✯ Character development: 7/10
It's not seen much in the beginning chapters, but it's to be expected in the upcoming chapters.
✯ Grammar and vocals: 11/15
I see how it's improving chapter to chapter, but use punctuations correctly.
✯ Writing style: 7/10
Can be improved, make more descriptive, and engage your readers with attractive words. For example use synonymous instead of using widely used one like ' good, said, cry ' etc.
✯ Overall: 3/5
It has criteria to grow.
✯ Personal enjoyment: 3/5
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Total marks: 60/100
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