𝐅𝐢𝐱𝐞𝐫 𝐑𝐞𝐯𝐢𝐞𝐰𝐬 : 𝐏𝐨𝐥𝐢𝐬𝐡𝐢𝐧𝐠 𝐩𝐞𝐧𝐬, 𝐄𝐦𝐩𝐨𝐰𝐞𝐫𝐢𝐧𝐠 𝐀𝐮𝐭𝐡𝐨𝐫𝐬
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A. N. A. L. Y. S. I. S
Characters:
The three main characters are the three Oberoi brothers:
Ahaan Oberoi, the eldest son of the Oberois and the ruthless king of the Indian Mafia world.
Reyansh Oberoi, the second son of the Oberoi family, is a renowned neurologist and a proud underground bike racer who loves to play with people's minds.
Vihaan Oberoi, the youngest son of the Oberoi family and the mastermind of the Oberoi's business empire.
Writing Style:
The story is written in third person pov omniscience. This means that the thoughts and actions of all the characters in the setting are expressed.
Spellings and Vocabulary:
Grammar and spelling is very well done. Paragraphs without dialogues are a bit bulky. Punctuation should be worked on, there is a lack of commas.
E. V. A. L. U. A. T. I. O. N
Overall Impression:
Three love stories that encircle the lives of the Oberoi brothers and the women who get their hearts. This plot style is not as common and when seen is written as separate books for each brother. However, in this case, it is all in one book.
Despite the little intertwining of the three love stories into each other, the first focus starts from the love life of the eldest brother, before blending into the other two.
The author did a good job in introducing all the characters earlier on, but this means that there is a lack of an element of surprise.
Recommendation:
I would advise reducing the amount of pictures in the story. Pictures of location are understandable but gestures can be explained without the use of a visual reference.
Stories like this, when developed well can take the reader on a fantasy adventure. I would suggest removing unnecessary details that add nothing to the story.
Anything about excessive description of walking, showering or mundane things that have nothing to do with the plot should be removed.
When it comes to the emotional and romance between the couple, show and don’t tell. Let it be apparent in their gestures and not just in words.
Also, work on the tense structure. There are many instances of switches between present and past tense.
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