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Save Me by sunflowerbeauties
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Reviewed by katrina12234

Title : 10/10

Cover: 10/10

Blurb:

The blurb is wonderfully written. It awakens a curiosity within the reader to read the book. The last line "how? More importantly why him"

Could be rephased into full sentences.For example you could write it like

"But how? And more importantly why him?"

This is just a suggestion since it will flow much better when written in a similar style  with the rest of the blurb.

Writing style:

The story is written in third person with a blend of the narrator speaking as well as the characters speaking via dialogues.

The characters inner monologue is written in italics which allows the reader to feel the emotions of the charecter in first person.

Flow and pace :

The pacing of the book is good. It's not to slow not to fast.

Character:

The characters are portrayed well. The prologue gave us a lovely background for the protagonist Jungguk, who has been portrayed to be a poor hardworking boy.

Plot:

The plot is very well thought out and has good potential, with the aspect of the Loop theory.

Grammar :

There were a few sentences in the book which could be framed better, to maintain the flow in the book.

Also some of the dialogue, I felt were not matching up with the tense the book was written in.

For example

"He knew deep down he needed a break. But sigh,he couldn't afford one"

Could be re written as

" He knew he needed a break, but unfortunately he couldn't afford one. He sighed. "

This provides more clarity to the sentence and also flows a lot better.

Overall

Over all, I thoroughly am intrigued by the plot and the storyline. The charecters are very well portrayed and the pacing is nice. The entire book is based on a suspenseful plot.

The only thing which keeps throwing me off from focussing on the chapters were the sentence structures and Grammar. I would reccomend re reading the chapters again, since some Grammar mistakes are present which could irritate the reader.

Also please do be careful when typing the stories and editing then, since I did find a few place where the sentence made no sense, since the words were missing..

Thanks and I do hope you don't take any of this feedback negatively. The book was really good, but as a reviewer I was paying extra attention, trying to find places where you could improve.