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~ Review 64 - Beneath The Stars by @ash_cr3am ~

Book Information

Title: Beneath the Stars
Author: ash_cr3am

Genre: Age-gap romance
Chapters: 16
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arget Audience: 14-30

Reviewed by Kanye_Ariel

A. N. A. L. Y. S. I. S

Writing Style:

The story is written in first person pov. The author describes physical gestures, surroundings and thoughts of the main speaker.

There is a good balance between description and dialogue. The thoughts of other characters may not be written verbatim but you can sense their state of mind from the dialogues.

Spellings and Vocabulary:

Spelling has no issues. Sentence structure is well written. Punctuations are in the right place. The paragraphing and dialogues are well-spaced.

E. V. A. L. U. A. T. I. O. N

Overall Impression:

The way the author describes the female lead's view of her art struck me. The pacing of each chapter is not rushed and lets the reader feel like they are also a part of the story. You can almost see it like a scene of a movie playing out.

However, the female lead's voice gives the impression of a very very young child. It almost feels sinful.

Recommendation:

I

would recommend aging the voice of the female lead but at least the impression that she is of legal age.

I would advise against description dumping especially when it comes to clothing description. Instead, give scenarios in the story that will subtly call attention to her clothing without making it too obvious.

I also want to point out the number of chapters between their first meeting and their wedding. It's a bit too much for such little interaction that occurred between them.