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~ Review 103 : The Dark Temptation by @eggywegggyi2 ~

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Book Information
Title: The Dark Temptation
Author: eggywegggyi2
Genre: Fantasy Romance
Chapters: Prologue +12
Target Audience: 12-25

Reviewed by Kanye_Ariel

A. N. A. L. Y. S. I. S

Characters:

Laela is depicted as a fearless, adventurous and fiesta persona. She can be quite forward with her reaction to situations. She didn't care how others viewed her and only what she viewed herself as. She doesn't feel the need to pretend to be someone else to get the attention or likes of others.

Thosar is depicted as a focused, dutiful and responsible crown prince. His position has put a lot of weight and hope on his shoulder especially during this time of war.

Writing Style:

The story is written in first person point of view with the main voice noted at the chapter. The story is quite descriptive in painting a clear picture of the surroundings. The views or gestures of others are showman from how the main character perceives it.

Spellings and Vocabulary:

Spelling has little to no errors. Punctuations are also in the right places. Vocabulary is simple and sentence structure ranges from simple to compound.

Paragraphing can be worked on. Dialogue and narrations need to be separated by paragraphs.

E. V. A. L. U. A. T. I. O. N

Overall Impression:

The prologue feels like a foreshadowing of a drastic event that would probably happen in the nearest future. However, the cliffhanger leaves the readers wondering what exactly would be the final outcome.

However, the end of the first chapter makes me wonder if that was less of a foreshadowing and more of an event that actually happened in the present.

Then suddenly, we are taken through the journey from two different view points and persons. Their separate lives intertwine in interesting ways.

Strengths & Weaknesses:

The one thing that stuck out to me was actually what ties the two main characters together. I wonder how this story is going to play out because of this singular incident.

Recommendation:

Work on paragraphing and reduce expository narration that gives too much details that aren't needed.