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《Kailyn》Games of Love

Games of Love by Deardevil123
Reviewer: Kailyn Kailucy
~Public review

Cover: 9/10

The cover is alright. The images are good and I like the color scheme but the subtitle is hard to read because it's blurry. But the title is sized well, and easy to read, and the font is nice as well.

Title: 10/10

I like the title. It's simple but says a lot. It fits the plot perfectly.  

Blurb: 8/10

The blurb is interesting. It raises some questions and tells us a little about the main character. However, a few lines were a little hard to understand and it needs punctuation.

Characters: 6/10

The characters aren't terrible but they do need some more development. Not trying to be harsh but there's barely anything to know about them. It's only been three chapters so I understand that they shouldn't be completely fleshed out so there's more development throughout but I hardly know anything. I feel like there should be a little bit more known, like not info-dumping but a bit more known about Mira other than her hate/disgust of romance novels.

Plot: 16/20

The plot is interesting but once again there's a lack of description. It's a bit too fast-paced in the sense that there should be a little bit of description here and there so it's not confusing. This is mostly for the prologue. The other chapters had better descriptions.

Writing style: 18/20

I do like the simplicity of your writing style. It's fun to read as well. 

Grammar/spelling/vocabulary: 7/10

There weren't very many grammar mistakes, but quite a bit of punctuation was missing. Mostly ending punctuation.

Enjoyment: 6/10

I enjoyed it for most part, the plot is interesting, but I'm not sure if it hooked me enough to continue. 

Overall: 80/100

Overall, it could use some work but you definitely have a great plot and ideas. I hope this review wasn't too harsh. I definitely don't want to be. Basically, if you added ending punctuation and added a little more detail in the prologue it would fix a lot.