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《Blade》The Daydreamer's Club: Class of 2001

Reviewer: DeathBlade__

REVIEW - THE DAYDREAMERS CLUB: CLASS OF 2001 (RookWri78) 

The first 4 chapters were reviewed.

Title: 3/5   

- The low score is mainly because I don't see any of the title in the plot so far. It's hard to judge within four chapters but since they were all introductory, I didn't see anything that had the potential to become a club.

- Referring to the blurb, it seems to be about a sci-fi quest. Even in the blurb, however, there's no mention of daydreamers or a class of 2001. I'd suggest having a more accurate title that matches slightly with the blurb, if not in the first few chapters of the book.

- Also, it's too lengthy. This isn't necessarily a bad thing but it makes the title hard to remember. Maybe opt for either 'The Daydreamers Club' or 'Class of 2001' (but if doing, either, give hints related to the title in the blurb).

Cover: 2/5

- There isn't much going on in the cover. It's simply a background image with the title in the front. Even the background image doesn't really give any hints related to the plot since it's very plain. To me, it just looks like a starry night and that doesn't seem to fit the theme of the book very much.

- I'd say to have a background that has more details. Perhaps you can have a club or silhouettes of people discussing something. Or, you could touch into the sci-fi parts of the story to make an intense background.

- The font, in my opinion, isn't very eye-catching. It's very simple and it doesn't pull me into the book. You could use bolder fonts and use brighter shades in order to make it look appealing.

- I'd say the whole drawback of the cover is that it isn't eye-catching, and nor does it fit the plot since it doesn't have too many details. Working on those aspects could really increase the first impression.

Blurb: 3/5

- The blurb is written incredibly well! It's short, but it's more than enough to pull me into the book. The first line is an excellent way to pull a reader into a book and the succeeding paragraph is perfectly written.

- The only drawback, that I mentioned in the title as well, is that it doesn't give any hints related to the title. Since the first few chapters don't, I think it would be helpful to add hints about why the title is so in the blurb at least.

- Other than this though, I really liked the blurb. If I were to read the blurb alone, it would have got a full score but tying it in with the other aspects needs a little work.

Writing Style: 5/10

This would be easier if I were to break it down into chapters, so I will be doing just that.

Chapter 1

> The first line was amazing. The description of the beaten-up man was written really well and it felt like we were diving right into the action which I really liked.

> What I noticed immediately was that there were quite many characters with long names. Since it's only the first chapter, and there were already a relatively larger number of characters, I found it hard to follow when you kept switching from their first and last names. I had to reread scenes multiple times to realize who was who. This is something I faced in all the chapters I read.

> Young-ja talks to those gang members and in my very blunt opinion, they didn't seem cool enough to be gang members. I understand that Young-ja being a detective had to be much cooler than them but I didn't like how they were kind of dumbed down. Perhaps you can work more on that scene in such a way that both parties look bold in their own ways and Young-ja is just better.