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《Yasmin》Heartwell: Incandescence

Client: TheManofFiction

Reviewer: Owls1221

Title: 10/10

The title was a bit confusing at first, but I did some research for the meaning of the words and now I find the title to be fascinating indeed. From my understanding, the story might be about a family name that holds some kind burning meaning behind it or something like that. It's an epic title in my opinion.

Cover: 9/10

The cover is well done. It's just missing the author's name on the cover.

Summary: 9/10

The summary is intriguing and it makes me interested to find out what happens in the book. It also gave a peculiar atmosphere. Although it didn't give me information regarding the timeline of the plot, whether it takes place in medieval, Victorian, or modern times. It was a bit confusing for me, so just add a hint of the time period.

Grammar: 10/10

The grammar was done appropriately and accurately. Well, there were some errors but they seem to be accidental/typos.

I pointed some of them below.

Prologue:

"Every so softly" should be "ever so softly"

"He" meant to be "She"

"It's beating" meant to be "its beating" for possessive meaning

"Lounged" meant to be "lunged"

Chapter 1:

"Feel" rather than "feeling" in "she could almost feeling"

"Put" instead of "but on a show"

They're really few and scattered throughout the book but it didn't affect me much because I understand them as typos. When you have the time you could proofread it again.

Vocabulary: 10/10

The vocabulary was brilliant and consistent. The way you used them and how you put certain terminology to convey what is happening was phenomenal.

Spelling: 9.5/10

Again, the majority was good. There were little misspellings.

Hook: 10/10

I was pretty hooked! So hooked by the events that unfolded in the book. I'll explain further in the other sections.

Character Development: 10/10

The characters were so interesting to read. I liked the way you showcased their personality through their dialogue and interaction with one another. I also liked the way you portrayed their emotions. You've done a very good job. There's more I want to say but again, see the other sections.

Plot Development: 10/10

The plot was developing. However, because this takes place in a fictional world, there was a lot of world-building presented so we can get the gist of the plot and how the world operates. Which I really didn't mind.

Personal Enjoyment: 10/10

Here's the thing, I really really enjoyed reading this story. The reasons are that: the book has a steampunk element to it which is my favourite. The whole plot was truly fascinating to read, it was like Maze Runners but imagine it taking place in the Victorian period (probably a dystopian era as well?) mixed with steampunk.