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《Blade》The Resistance

REVIEWER - Blade DeathBlade__

REVIEW - THE RESISTANCE (aurorazelaire )

The first 7 chapters were reviewed.

Title: 4.5/5
- The title fits the book perfectly. A lot of times when people try to disobey harsh laws, they form a resistance group which is the main idea of your book. Keeping this in mind, the title is very fitting.
- I also like how short but catchy it is. It makes the title very easy to remember and creates a great impression in the reader's mind.
- The only minor issue is that the title feels very common. In terms of uniqueness, it doesn't stand out very much but keeping the other factors in mind, this was easy to ignore (however, I still thought to mention it).

Cover: 3/5
- The cover feels intense, which fits the book. I love the fonts you used and the subtitle fits very well.
- However, I don't see how the other elements fit the book. For starters, the background image is that of a broken clock which doesn't seem to be of much importance in the plot so far. It would make more sense for it to be filled with weapons or anything fight-related (considering everything that has happened in the book so far)
- Perhaps in future chapters it would make more sense but up to this point, weapons would me more fitting.
- Another thing I'd like to suggest is to not cover the background object with the text. I think an object-based cover (you could search them on google) would fit perfectly for your book, granted you don't cover it up with the text.

Blurb: 3/5
- The blurb is very interesting. You've given all the necessary information and it is enough to pull a reader.
- The problem is it's too long. People usually read blurbs to have a summarized view of the book. While this does do that, the length might push people away from it. They aren't likely to go through the whole blurb which doesn't give them the first impression they seek.
- My suggestion would be to cut out the first paragraph. Instead of mentioning the resistance separately only to mention that again in the second paragraph, you could do it all at once.
- Try to incorporate the important details from the first paragraph into the second so that you can completely omit the first one.
- The final paragraph could be improved a little. You leave us off with two questions but because it's in a paragraph, I was expecting the sentence to continue. Instead of that, you could have a final, stand-alone sentence that gives a dramatic ending to the blurb.
For example: The most important all,  will Serephine Degen lose?
- This line alludes to her character a lot, as well as the recurring thought in her head which would sound very interesting and clever.
- These are only my suggestions. You can go with it whichever way you like but I hope I was able to point out some minor flaws in the blurb.

Writing Style: 8.5/10
- I really like the writing style. The words you used to describe the surroundings were immaculate and it made me enjoy reading the book so much.
- The writing style was very easy to follow. It didn't distract me from the plot too much while also giving the perfect amount of information.
- The way you wrote Sera's emotions was so good. The character's feelings overall were written really well which made me relate to them a lot more (more on that later).
- You had certain one-liners which simply blew me away.
- The beginning of the first chapter was so good! I love that sentence a lot and I really like how it is repeated so many times and in different instances. It shows that the sentence has great importance and I'd love to see where that ends.
- In chapter 2, Sera thinks A fool's mistake. I have no empathy towards my kind. That sentence left me so impressed and it gave me such a great insight into what her character is like.
- The scenes of torture were my favorite to read! It was a little disturbing, which is exactly what's required! The excruciating pain Sera was going through was described perfectly, which made me appreciate those scenes a lot.
- I also really loved how you'd switch from her flashbacks and present state. It allowed me to compare them a lot, all the while remaining curious about what really happened in the past.
- The only thing I thought could use some improvement was the world-building. Sera is supposed to be a fae and discriminated against but how are faes different from humans? They have pointed ears but that seems to be all the difference there is. The blurb mentions that they lost their powers but if they did, how are they any different from humans? 
The world seems very similar to real life and I feel like more changes could show the effect of the discrimination faes go through. Also, even if it's necessary in the plot currently, I'd say giving more fae insight would help relate to them and their cause more.
- Other than this though, I really have nothing bad to say about the writing style. I really enjoyed it!