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《Arena》Resilience

Title: Resilience by Hassina_G
Reviewer: Dystopian_Quxxn
Chapters read: All (One)

First, thank you so much for allowing me to review your story! It's an honor and I hope you can get something out of it!!

Title: 8/10

For me, the title is one of the stamps to draw in a reader, so when I read titles, I wonder, is it eyecatching? For me, it is! Titles are also like a One-word(or one sentence) summary of what you're about to read. For me, a title is crucial and shouldn't be overlooked. Oftentimes, writers think outside of the box, and put a long title, and others, go short on their titles. For me, I think something simple but eyecatching is all we need.

Resilience is very simple, and is quite vague. I only was able to read one chapter, as you only have one published.The chapter itself doesn't mention much for the title except for the ending paragraph, but I think that keeps the readers edging onto the next chapter. However, as simple as it is, it might be too vague. Some suggestions:

What are the main themes? Is it a cruel resilience full of twists and turns? Maybe "The Corrupt Resilience" or even "Helix: The Resilience". There's many ways you can add to the title to make it pop out just a little more. Even adding "The" could give it more "flavor." Other suggestions are: "Resilience Code", "Ava Grace: Resilience" or "Genetic Resilience". Anything to grow more readers to your story. These are just some suggestions. Since I only got one chapter, it leaves much more room for titles that I may not know. If you like "Resilience" that is fine too!

Cover: 7/10

Covers is the second stamp after the title, to draw readers into your story. Covers are also hard to find just the right one! With covers, it should feel like an opening to what you're about to read, and the main focus of the story.

That being said, your cover gives that and a piece of pie. It tells you exactly what's going to happen, right?

With that in mind, I will say it is not the most "stylistic" cover I've seen. It does the job, but it could improve immensely. The cover itself does not give me "Dystopian" vibes, if that makes sense. Most Dystopian are more austere and simple. Your's is simple, but it's also "bland". How can we fix that?

My suggestions are: Making/or ordering a brighter cover. I understand the book is probably intended to be a darker theme, such as resilience; however, the cover is a bit dark, and could be more eyecatching. I do like the fire, but I think the fire needs to stick out more, if you want fire on it.

The people on the cover are a little interesting, as they look to me, as if they're gathering or talking to one another, rather than fighting or causing resilience. I'm not sure what you were getting at there, but I would suggest perhaps having people with weapons/fire, or maybe two sides, one side pushing against another–if that makes sense.

Other ideas are: Adding the girl to the cover, with the people in the background, maybe if you have a symbol for the Helix, that would be neat to add.

I do feel as if you could do better on the cover, but it is nice!

Blurb: 10/10

Blurbs are the third stamp to your story, and cannot be overstressed on their importance. Blurbs are the hook and get your readers started. They should be long enough to catch the readers' attentions, as well as make them continue with your book. The blurb should not be a summary of the book, and should not give off any important information...And YOU DID just the right thing.

Blurbs are some of the hardest things to write (at least for me), and I feel as if you hit the spot perfectly! As a Dystopian reader/writer, I just loved your blurb! It caught me right away, and definitely got me hooked.