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《Kailyn》My Melancholy

Customer: Rising-Queen

Reviewer: Kailucy

(Poetry is reviewed differently and I don't score it. Sorry for the wait.)

Cover:

Firstly, I love the color scheme. It goes well with the title. The image reminds me a bit of an older art style, it's lovely. However, there are a few things that could make it better. One, the title on the cover doesn't match with the title on the heading. The heading says "My Melancholy" and the cover simply says, "Melancholia" It's not a huge difference but it's still worth noting. And second, the subtitle is blurry, making it really hard to read. Other than those two things the cover is wonderful.

Title:

I love the title. It has a rhythm and flows. Perfect for a poetry collection. It fits the poetry inside as well. Wonderful job with the title.

Overall:

Overall, I loved this collection of poetry. The words flowed and I can tell you put everything into them. I couldn't stop reading them and I loved every second. They each had many strengths making it hard for me to pick a few to spotlight. There were some grammar mistakes laced throughout them though they weren't super distracting but definitely noticeable. Some other mistakes I noticed were that some words were randomly capitalized. Other than that they were well written and wonderful to read.

Poems that stood out:

Selfish:

What a way to start! The first line completely captured my attention. The progression in this poem was well done. I think this was the best poem to start the collection off. It gives enough insight into your mind and gives the reader a taste of your words. Amazing job!

Train Travel:

This one is one of my favorites that I read. (I read all of them) Not only in this collection but one of my favorites in general. The metaphor caught my attention straight away and kept it til the end.

The first stanza really set the scene, "Sat on a train for life's journey

At first, it was chill and stress-free"

Those first two lines are simple but they say so much. It introduces the metaphor of taking a train through life, and it mentions at first there was no stress. Then the stanza continues, "Befriended the passengers along,

Everything going smooth

Nothing wrong"

I particularly like that there are some hints of ominousness in these lines.

Then in the following stanzas, you showcase the highs and lows of the journey. In the second stanza, you mention new experiences and how the train "went through the darkest of tunnels."

The last stanza also stood out when you mentioned your life is that train. It tied all the stanzas together nicely and was a wonderful way to end.

Inner Child:

This one is heartbreaking. The words are so heartfelt. I've read several poems dealing with this topic and I love your spin. The lines that stood out are:

"Where are those days

When I owned freedom's key?

Today those people locked my heart

Broke these beautiful wings."

The last stanza ties it all together. The use of words added so many layers of emotion.

"I committed a crime

That night I killed my inner child"

Those two lines alone set this poem apart.

Mystical weather:

The rhyme scheme is so good in this. I loved this one so much. It's a bit of a break from the dark and gloomy nature of the rest of the book. Wonderful job!