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《Sadie》The Goddess' Chosen

 
Book: The Goddess' Chosen

Reviewer: twoshortnails

Author: JessicaPowell481

Chapters read: All

Cover:

Firstly, I really love the fact you drew the art for the cover yourself. The shading and proportions are really good, and much better than anything I could have done. To improve, I think that the colours of the art, especially the blue side, are too bright against the black and white background. It might be worth toning down the saturation, only a little bit though, because the colours are what make the art so good!

You've used silhouettes fantastically, and your cover is pulled together so well!! I really do love it, and the fact that you created the key element is so special and unique.

The font is very suitable, and gives off perfect fantasy vibes. Two things that I'm going to suggest: remove the little orange text saying 'Wattpad Original', because it sticks out in a negative way; and possibly remove the chunk of text starting with 'the goddess has...' That text makes the cover too crowded and takes some of the attention away from your artwork.

I'm really impressed with the design of your cover, and keep pursuing your art — it's fabulous to see someone love creating stories and art!

Title:

To start with, the title looks really, really good on the cover. I'm not often a big fan of titles that are in this basic format, but I think that your title does work very well for your book. This might just be me being British, but I would write 'Goddess's' as 'Goddess''. i.e., without the extra 's' on the end. So, the title would be: 'The Goddess' Chosen'. This is completely optional, and depends on what you think would look better, I'm pretty sure both ways are grammatically correct.

Blurb/Description:

I think that your blurb is pretty much perfect!

You don't need to make those sentences bold, they are separate from the chunky paragraphs, so they stand out anyway. You're really good at using sentence variation, meaning you are varying your sentence lengths. This creates tension, and anticipation, which is great for blurbs.

I like the way you introduce your characters, and the overall content that you have included is truly remarkable. There's a brilliant balance between divulging information and making the reader want to find it out. Another thing that is positive about your blurb is the fact that you don't overload the reader with loads of information. There aren't too many names mentioned, and the reader gets the basic gist without being like 'woah, so there's John, Amy, Susan, Sarah, David, Jane and... who else?'

One more thing: the sentence 'and that is only the beginning... ...will play the key role'. It's too long, and too awkward, so I rephrased it to:

'And this is only the beginning — for a war is coming. A war, in which the abomination he found — the abomination, and yet so much more — will play the key role.'

I basically broke up the sentence into two parts, so it is easier to read. Overall, I'm really happy with your blurb.

Characters:

Right away, I'm impressed with the way you've introduced your characters

The first chapter is well written, with good descriptions, grammar, and flow. I like the way you describe your characters, with Ivory as someone who is innocent and slightly ignorant, and her how her parents' are secretive. It's very well done, and I feel that your writing style, where you slip in little hints that alludes to the character, means the reader has to pick up, and correctly interpret them — making the book more interactive and therefore enjoyable for a reader.