Fortunately, there is a plethora of books swimming in Wattpad with the same name, and although your book is unique, there is still a chance for it to stand out. Consider choosing a more distinct and original title that sets it apart from the rest.
Cover: (2/10)
Firstly, the book cover lacks attractiveness. By using a picture of Jungkook with a calm facial expression and a messy font layer, it doesn't create a visually appealing look. As it is a sibling ff, it would be better to include all BTS members as they are the leads.
Seeing your cover, I felt a slight disappointment, but it's alright, you can make improvements and create a fresh and captivating cover. Remember, in the world of Wattpad, the cover is the first thing readers notice and it influences their decision to read the book!
Blurb : (0/10)
Once again, I was disappointed with your blurb. It lacks any additional information about the storyline and instead focuses on yourself, which is unnecessary. After someone clicks on the book, they are seeking a concise and intriguing summary of the plot. Consider revising your blurb to provide enticing details about the story line, ensuring that readers are captivated from the start.
Pace : ( 3/10)
The pace wasn't incredibly fast, but it had a slight sense of urgency. In my experience, it would be beneficial to show more emotions within each character's perspective. Even though the pace may have been rapid, I couldn't fully engage in expressing their emotions. Please consider injecting more emotional depth into the writing.
Character development : ( 3/10)
This is the key point I would like to emphasize. I personally find the portrayal of the main character, yn, to be somewhat unrealistic considering she is only 16 years old. It is difficult to believe that such a young girl could possess such immense strength.
Please consider writing her emotions in a more authentic manner. Additionally, it seems as though the book lacks character development overall. I encourage you to focus on the other leads and foster their growth instead of solely focusing on yn.
Concept and plot : (1/10)
To be honest, the concept and plot don't feel very realistic. There are numerous step-sibling fanfics with the same storyline, which gives the impression that no originality was incorporated. I urge you to craft your own unique script and infuse it with fresh ideas.
Grammar and Vocabulary :: (5/10)
I am not saying your did so many grammatical mistakes,and it was good but there are still grammatical and punctuation mistake you. Need to edit that like
U reached home went inside nd directly plopped yourself on the couch....
After sometime U went to your room nd get freshed then started doing your homeworks
<<TIME SKIP>>
It's 6 PM nd ur still doing your homeworks suddenly u heard door unlock sound, u understood tht's your
Your Mom shouted from downstairs..
Mom: Y/n come downstairs I brought food from outside for dinner, I'll get freshed nd then serve the dinner *said in One breath*
Your face lit up when she mentioned outside food, U pack your bagpack for tommorow school nd dashed downstairs....
Mistakes and explanation
1. 'U' is not a proper word, it should be 'You'. 2. 'Nd' should be 'and'. 3. 'Get freshed' should be 'got fresh'. 4. 'Homeworks' should be 'homework'. 5. 'Ur' should be 'your'. 6. 'Tht's' should be 'that's'. 7. 'Your Mom' should be 'Your mom'. 8. 'Get freshed' should be 'get fresh'. 9. 'Nd' should be 'and'. 10. 'Face lit up' should be 'face lightened up'. 11. 'U' should be 'You'. 12. 'Bagpack' should be 'backpack'. 13. 'Tommorow' should be 'tomorrow
Writing style : (3/10)
Your writing style could benefit from some improvement, but with more practice, you can definitely enhance it. Instead of simply adding lines or dialogues, try incorporating emotions into your sentences.
In my opinion, writing is an art, and structuring your thoughts in paragraphs can be beneficial. If you accept my advice, consider infusing more emotions into your writing and switching to paragraph form rather than just using lines.
Overall enjoyment : (2/10)
I don't feel much of a connection with the characters, and I personally find your writing font a bit dull, which makes the story less engaging. I suggest trying a edifferent font and adding more emotions to your writing. Additionally, expressing your emotions freely in multiple paragraphs can make your writing more captivating.
If writing is an art, then remember to write in paragraphs and infuse more emotions into your work.
Rating of the book : (2/10)
Your book requires substantial editing in every aspect. I cannot give it a higher rating at this point. However, you can improve by practicing more and using various techniques. Consider updating your cover and blurb, as well as changing your writing style, which could greatly assist you.
Total :: (21/100)
Note from the reviewer : Please don't take me as rude I am only being honest.
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