𝐒𝐇𝐀𝐃𝐎𝐖: 𝐑𝐄𝐕𝐈𝐄𝐖 𝐒𝐇𝐎𝐏 𝐈𝐈

51. Our Princess

Author of the book:  Minnie_0408
Reviewer: Sugaga777

Title: 6/10

The title of this book is common but kinda suits the story oddly… In my opinion, you should rethink the story and make a suitable title. Add a subtitle, it would be good.

Cover: 7/10

The cover seems well-edited and neat. It doesn't describe the story concept but it is eye-catching.

Blurb: 6/10

The blurb was in quick length. It describes the story not very well. you must add some dialogue, quotes, and rhetorical questions, to catch some readers.

Grammar and Vocabulary: 4.5/10

The use of grammar is fine, I found a lot of grammatical errors and 2-3 misstructured sentences. You should use punctuation when necessary, there was a lack of its use. Keep in mind that all the names of the characters should be “Capital”. There should be no gaps between punctuation and words. For example:

This is what you wrote.

" Why are you sending me back I want to stay with you " I whined as Dad was practically dragging me towards his car

" Bella you can't say here " Dad said

" But why" I said

And it should be like this:

"Why are you sending me back? I want to stay with you," I whined as Dad was practically dragging me towards his car.

"Bella, you can't say here," Dad said.

"But why?!" I said.

I also found mistakes in spelling and typos. Keep an eye on your tenses, rest is good! The vocabulary was casual and did not seem to fit the atmosphere of the story. I suggest you use more complex words to create a nice atmosphere.

Pace: 10/10

The story is smooth and has no rush. It's very intriguing to read, everything is becoming more interesting. Many things were disclosed in the story.

Characters Development: 8.5/10

Characters have a good personality, but according to their behaviour, it was hard to get their emotions well, you should use some actions and gestures to show emotions.

Concept and Plot: 8/10

The concept of the story is great, it's common to write about mafias but your plotting is different from many. It's interesting.

Writing style: 6/10

Your writing style is good. If you wanna display a dream you should use Italian font or mention that it is a dream, for thoughts you can do the same by using italic font.

Overall Presentation: 8.5/10

This book is really good, you need to improve your writing and presentation.

Rating of the book: 8.5/10

I enjoyed this book. It's interesting to be honest.

Total: 73/100

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