63. Lost Mafia Siblings

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Author:: someone12085

Reviewer::  peacefulregrets

Title:: 7/10

The title makes sense, but there's room for a more unique choice to truly capture the heart of the novel.

Cover:: 8/10

The cover, showcasing the main characters, is captivating and grabs attention admirably, earning it a solid 8 out of 10.

Description:: 5/10

The book description comes across a bit ordinary, lacking a gripping hook. The use of ellipses and incomplete sentences could use some refining to enhance its appeal. A more polished language would do wonders in presenting the story's intrigue more engagingly.

Pace:: 8/10

The pacing is skillfully handled, maintaining a harmonious rhythm throughout the narrative.

Concept and plot:: 6/10

While the concept and plot is robust, it leans towards familiar themes. Encouraging the author to inject a unique element could elevate the narrative.

Characters:: 8/10

The characters are meticulously crafted, yet providing additional insights into their strengths and flaws would enrich this section.

Grammar:: 7/10

Though free from major grammatical errors, some enhancements are in order. Introducing varied sentence structures and incorporating conjunctions would contribute to a smoother narrative flow.

Writing style:: 5/10

On the positive side, the writing establishes a fitting casual tone for the young adult genre and effectively uses dialogue. However, the lack of vivid descriptions leaves settings and characters less defined. Addressing repetitive lines and infusing more detail into scenes is necessary for improvement.
Example Improvement:

Original: "Y/n: Where are the other 2 idiots?? looking around ??1, ??2: We're not idiots whining Jaemin: Sure in a sarcastic way"

Improved: Y/n's eyes darted around the hallway, seeking the missing duo. "Where are the other two idiots?" She remarked, scanning the area with an arched brow. "We're not idiots!" They objected, their whining voices blending. Jaemin, a smirk playing on his lips, retorted with dripping sarcasm, "Sure."

Overall Impression:: 6/10

The book "Lost Mafia Siblings" by @someone12085 has its strengths but also areas that could be improved.

Rating of the book:: 6/10

Total:: 66/100

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