( FINISHED ) Wings of Fire OC Rating

Sakura

OC belongs to @IvorySans

Name: Sakura

Oh I like this one!

Age: 7

Okay

Gender: Female

Cool

Sexuality: Straight/Demisexual

Neat

Tribe: RainWing

Nice

Appearance: Sakura's scales are a purplish-pink color. Her wings fade from light pastel purple to a dark, almost grayish purple. She was born with poor eyesight, so she wears a pair of glasses. Her eyes are dark blue, and she has a sleek and graceful body type.

Haha poor eyesight same. Anyways, this is simple, but pretty descriptive for a RainWing. Nice job.

Personality: Sakura has bipolar disorder, which gives her severe mood swings. Thankfully, with the help of an enchantment from her animus sister, Fairywren, the number of episodes she has is down to a minimum. Sakura is intelligent, compassionate, curious, and mostly introverted, though she is a happy and cheerful dragon overall.

I don't know much about bipolar disorders, so I'm not going to comment on it. However, I would say to add a few negative traits — such as, maybe due to her cheerfulness and curiosity, she can come off as a little overwhelming to some people.

Occupation: Aspiring librarian, explorer, collector of knowledge.

Neat

Residence: The Rainforest Kingdom (current location- Kingdom of Sand *see backstory*)

Alright

Relatives:
Mother- Lilac
Father- Margay
Younger sister- Fairywren (animus)

These are cool names, but I'm wondering how her sister got animus magic — is she a hybrid, or a full RainWing?

Friends:
Oracle (Female, NightWing, seer)
Revelation (Male, NightWing)
Coldheart (Male, NightWing)
Hyacinth (Male, RainWing, love interest ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°))
Tapir (Female, RainWing)
Batwing (Female, RainWing) *Batwing is a type of butterfly
Cereus (Male, Rain-NightWing, deceased)
And many others from her travels.

"Batwing" lol. These are nice names tho.

Abilities: Regular RainWing abilities

Okay

Backstory: (some is copy-pasted from my Storage Unit book) Sakura was born a regular RainWing. However, her parents, Lilac and Margay, were determined to keep their child from conforming to the 'lazy and stupid' RainWing stereotype, and taught her to read and write at an early age. As she got older, she developed a natural curiosity for the world outside the rainforest, and the tribes that lived there. At seven years old, she packed up and began her journey around Pyrrhia, meeting many new dragons along the way.

This seems like a backstory for a side character, or the lead up to a story. I would say add more details about her childhood, such as — why her parents specifically didn't want her to be 'lazy and stupid', since if this is before Glory arrived then they wouldn't have cared either. Or how her sister has animus magic.

Overall, I give Sakura a 7/10. Work on her backstory, and a small bit on her appearance.