OC belongs to @Gecko47
Name: Lahar
Ooo, unique. I like it.
Age: 11
Cool.
Gender: Male
Nice.
Sexuality: panromantic
Alright.
Tribe: Mudwing
Not a tribe you see often.
Appearance: average sized, so not a bigwings. His scales are a dark brown-green and his underbelly is beige. His wing membranes are mahogany colored. He has several scars on his underbelly and legs, including a healed Sandwing tail scar on one shoulder. One of his forelegs is wrapped in a leather band inscribed with silver text. The text is in an older version of the dragon language, and it's a Mudwing proverb about protecting others.
Simple, yet descriptive. Just add some details like eye colour, claw/horn colour, etc.
Personality: he's a bit of a depressed boy ;w; I bet you weren't expecting that from a Mudwing. He has a strong belief that he's destined to die protecting someone else, so his self preservation instincts aren't great. He is dutiful, brave, and submissive, always looking for a good replacement 'bigwings' to tell him what to do. He has a very hard time making choices under pressure.
"he's a bit of a depressed boy" oh mood
In seriousness, add a few more positive traits. These all (expect dutiful and brave) seem like flaws.
Occupation: Soldier
Alright.
Residence: A Skywing Barracks, Northeast of the palace.
Cool.
Relatives: He had five other siblings, including his old bigwings, a female mudwing named Gharial, but he doesn't like to talk about them.
Gharial is also a unique name.
Friends: His squad of Skywings (sorta?) Redtail, Ridge, Terrace, Lark, and Flare. He views Redtail (captain) as his new bigwings. Ridge and Terrace like him because he helps them hunt. Lark is very 'purest' and doesn't like him at all- tried to burn his leather band. Flare thinks he's handsome but would never say bc they're scared of Lark.
Once again, nice names!
Backstory: His siblings all died in a single battle, leaving him the last survivor. He couldn't bring himself to choose another group, so he went to the Sky kingdom and pleaded to be randomly added to a squadron. They figured his brawn would be some use, so he was given to one, but his safety wasn't guaranteed. He didn't care about that- he just wanted purpose again.
This sounds like a set up to a fic, but if it's not, you need to add WAY more details. How was it like growing up? What happens after he joins the SkyWing squadron? Details.
Abilities: fire if warm enough, thick armored scales, usual teeth and claws. Has a cool hybrid fighting style of Skywing striking method/Mudwing defense.
Neat fact.
Overall, I give Lahar a 6/10. Work majorly on his backstory, and a little bit on his personality and appearance.
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