( FINISHED ) Wings of Fire OC Rating

Shadowseeker

OC belongs to @CreepyCat237

Name: Shadowseeker

A bit edgy but works for a NightWing.

Age: 12 in human years

Alright

Gender: Female

Okay

Sexuality: Straight

Cool

Tribe: NightWing

I like NightWings!

Looks: She has pitch black scales with silver horns and talons, and silver scales at the corners of her dark purple eyes. Her only piece of jewelry is a silver choke collar.

This is very bland, try adding more details, including her height, weight, etc (doesn't need to be specific, just skinny, tall, fat, short, etc).

Personality- She is shy at first, but when you get to know her she can be very sarcastic. She does not trust easily, so it's hard to make friends.

Add more flaws and virtues, this is very boring right now. If she is a minor character, it's fine, but add more details if she's a main.

Backstory: Shadowseeker was born soon after the NightWings moved in to the rainforest. Her parents moved away for unknown reasons before she got to know them very well. She has no friends, and lives alone, but she prefers it that way.

This is very very VERY short, and leaves lots of questions. Again, good for a minor, but if Shadowseeker's a main then you need lots more details, and I mean LOTS.

Occupation: She is a NightWing therapist, for those who feel left out because of the bad and mostly false reputation the NightWings have gotten from other tribes.

Okay, I guess. Doesn't seem to fit with her personality, though. If you were shy I would think maybe getting a job that didn't involve talking to random strangers about their feelings.

Residence: She lives in a little cottage at the edge of the NightWing village in the rainforest.

Okay

Realtives: She never knew who her parents were, but hopes to find them someday. She does have a brother, Constellation, who she does not see very often.

You probably should have mentioned something about Constellation in the backstory. Why doesn't she see him very often? Is she with her parents? What does he do?

Friends: None

Okay.

Abilities: She can breathe fire, read minds, and blend in with shadows.

Alright.

Hobbies: Playing pranks on people and watching them search everywhere for who did it, never suspecting the quiet NightWing who's always just in the background.

Odd, and doesn't match up well with the personality.

Overall, I give Shadowseeker a 3.5/10. You need to add a lot more details on her appearances, backstory, personality, and fix a few minor things so they match up with her personality.