( FINISHED ) Wings of Fire OC Rating

Salmon

OC belongs to @LiteralWoFTrash

Name: Salmon, the freshwater SeaWing

Okay name. Not to common but I've seen it before.

Gender: Male

Okay

Age: 13

Some adults!

Sexuality: Straight

Cool

Personality: Jittery and nervous, doesn't talk much, very antisocial, but great flier and swimmer.

Add some more good traits to balance out the bad ones. The personality is very simple.

Appearance: Super pale pink with undertones of purple and green, has freckles that are a darker pink than his normal pink color. His SeaWing fin crest starts and the front of his forehead instead of his neck and his horns go straight backwards. He has a large tail and wings. His wings have the NightWing "star-scales" but their are deep azure on pale pink. His tail fades into a dark purple at the tip and has blue NightWing spikes at the bottom. His gills are tinged a pale purple. He wears a golden hoop earring, a purple kelp earring, and an amulet shaped like a bubble to help him breathe.

I really like it! He sounds pretty.

Tribe: Sea/NightWing

Surprisingly one of the more common hybrids, but I like them.

Rank/Occupation: Flying teacher at Jade Mountain

Coolio. The only thing is that don't most dragonets that start at Jade Mountain already know how to fly? A more likely occupation would be Gym Teacher/Fighting Teacher.

Family: Seafoam the SeaWing and Starmind the NightWing

Nice names.

Mate: After a while he finds a SeaWing mate named Pod.

Cool. Cute name.

Dragonets: Azure and Deep

Also pretty names.

Other significant dragons: Auntie Sahara

Nice.

Abilities: None

Well, I guess breathing in fresh-water counts as an ability

Backstory: When he was born, he started choking on the air as he is only able to breathe fresh water. His parents freaked and put him into a nearby (fresh water) river. Seeing as he could not breathe air, his parents visited a family friend who is also animus, Auntie Sahara (she's not really an aunt). Sahara enchanted a bubble-shaped amulet so that he would be able to breathe air whenever it was on him. Afterwards, Salmon's parents took him to the ocean, but he couldn't breathe there either, even with the amulet. They realized that because of his hybrid-ness, Salmon could only naturally breathe in fresh water. With the amulet, though, he was able to start flying, and he loved it. He later developed a job at Jade Mountain as a flying instructor.

Well, this backstory is a bit bland. What happened during his childhood? Where did he grow up? Did he have any friends? Add some more details.

Cause of death: Suffocating in open air

Okay, makes sense

Overall, I give Salmon a 6.5/10. Work on his personality and backstory, add some more details.