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《Rose》 Her Sapphire Eyes

Reviewer: therosepoetk
Written by: moong0ddess

So first of all, I like your title. A big part of being a writer is using titles that essentially capture the essence of your work, and I’m sure that your title does that too. It’s descriptive, which works nicely. But I have to say, I’m not a huge fan of the cover. I think you took the meaning of your title and the imagery too literally instead of figuratively, and that brings the wrong sort of attention to your visuals. I suggest improving it by keeping the general eye design, but just replicating that “sapphire blue” colouring that you want. After all, the girl has sapphire coloured eyes, not eyes made of sapphire itself, correct? Just make sure your readers get that clarity. The blurb is nice, I don’t really see much to nitpick there. Your opening and plot though? Stellar. I absolutely adore this whole new concept that you're bringing to your audience here, and I like how it has the structure of a normalized fairytale without reusing tropes and common ideas. The characters all have such richness and poise to them, and I really like how you are able to capture their relationships with one another in such a short span of words. The flow, emotional appeal, and grammar are great, and your writing is so elegantly descriptive that I want you to get this seriously published. Like, make it into an anthology or picture book if that’s what you’d like! Overall, this is a super refreshing read, and I wish you all the best in other short stories my friend!