im really nervous rn bc i'm going to look into my old fanfictions and react to them
some fanfictions i havent looked at in years
and i am fuckigng terrified to look at them
i'm going to take about 1-2 exerpts from each book (they can be good or bad, idk i'm picking them at random)
okay here we go
The Adoption Center
An excerpt from Chapter 4 (lol its only 300 words wtf)
"Ok everyone meet up with your partners now. Your project is due in two weeks. Make it work." I swear my teacher sounds like Tim Gunn.
I walked to the other side of the room to see Aubrey. We made very awkward small talk for a while.
"Who's house are we gonna meet up at?" I asked. She thought about it for a second.
"Can we meet at your house?" She asked. "Sure I guess. Meet me after school outside the gate."
"Oh I can't do after school," she said."Can we meet up at like eight?"
"Ok," I said. I wrote down my address and gave it to her.
what the fuck omg
i mentioned tim gunn omg was i //that obsessed with project runway
plus my sentences were so choppy and short omg
past me didnt follow the "show dont tell rule"
and how fucking cliche can i get omfg
Excerpt from Chapter 17 (700 words now woo go me)
Since when does she play video games? I'm still not interested in her, nonetheless.
"Sorry I'm busy," I said.
"I never told you when," she stated bluntly.
"Still not interested, sorry."
"What does it take for you to like me!?"
"Stop acting like a slut. Why do you want me anyways? Is it your mission to bang every guy in the school?"
"No! How dare you say that to me! I only wanted you because I thought you were nice and sweet, but your just a big jerk!" Lilly screamed. Practically everyone in the halls heard what she said, including Aubrey.
"Wow Ty, you just hurt a girl's feelings," a person said.
LOOK AT ME FUCKING SLUT SHAMING AFBSKHDUI I WILL SLAP PAST ME
and wow i just wrote straight up dialogue was i that lazy haha
okay lets move onto a phan halloween one shot i wrote
I went trick-or-treating this year with only my mum. I didn't have any friends, so she has to take me. I dressed up as my favorite animal, which was the dinosaur, and grabbed my pumpkin basket.
My mum and I started to go out at around 6 at night. We went down each house in the neighborhood. By the end of the night, I was loaded. M&M's, Skittles, Sour Patch Kids, and even some Malteesers were filling my bucket to the brim.
By the time it was 8, I could've gone home. But there was still one house at the end of the neighborhood, and I wanted to check it out. I knocked on the door while my mum waited outside the gate.
A boy came out, with straight black hair pushed to the side like mine, but the combed the opposite direction, came out. He looked about my age.
"Yay! Mum look! Someone actually came!" The boy yelled in excitement.
"but the combed the opposite direction" omg same
and wow i actually wrote about dan and phil falling in love while kids was i that pathetic??????????
okay last one is a part from Fluffy Love aka why the fuck did write a merome fanfiction
excerpt from the chapter called "Some people are worth melting for."
"It's getting dark," I said.
"I know," Mitch said back.
"Aren't we going to stop?"
"Why would we do that?"
"Because it's dark."
"So? Are you tired?"
"Not necessarily." I was still pretty awake from what happened before.
"Then why should we stop?"
"Because it's dark and we can't see and there might be creatures that come out at night."
"Jerome, not to alarm you, but you are a creature also, and oh look, you are out at night."
"You know what I mean," I scolded and he smirked. I glanced over at Mitch, the moonlight shined on him just enough so I can see him, and I can see the stupid (and adorable) grin on his face after he made that snarky comeback.
"Can we just stop for now and continue in the morning?" I whined. Mitch then wiped the look off of his face.
"Jerome, that's the kind of fear that is going to hold you back. It is literally going to hold you back," he said. "Can you see the stream?"
"Yes."
"Can you see me?"
"Yes," I said again.
"Then you're fine, the moon is out for a reason, to provide us with light."
I whined a little more. Then Mitch told me to "shut up" and I obeyed him like good bacca I am. Then it started to get quiet and awkward again, so Mitch decided to speak.
"Hey, want to sing songs?" Mitch asked.
"I don't know any songs," I blatantly said.
"Well I know a song," he said.
"Which is?" I asked. Then Mitch cleared his throat and started to break into song.
"TWINKLE TWINKLE LITTLE STAR, HOW I WONDER WHAT YOU-" he sang in a voice that sounded like an animal in pain.
okay i was kinda funny here, especially with the part "but you are a creature, and look it's night or whatever." I JUST HATE THAT ITS JUST DIALOGUE LIKE WHY BE MORE DISCRIPTIVE OLIVIA
so i just think this proves that i have improved as a writer (yet i still dont know how to spell or apply proper grammar skills)
also while doing this i accidentally deleted the adoption center lol bye
