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The Owl House Copy and Paste

This story is of my own creation

Well, I'm not going to regret doing this at all... the things I do to revive this series.

I apologize for not keeping up with this series, there's not much to do with how I've explained what I need to and I can only clown on Shawn's abysmal writing for so long. Luckily, or unluckily, for me, people on a server have found out I like to write and think that sending me their work means I'll praise them. You can imagine how well that's going for them. I also have another story I'd like to review, because how can I not rant about the Amphibia cast getting tortured constantly for a backward reason like "Anne was thrown into the building and it collapsed, SHE'S AT FAULT!!!!" But onto this mess.

Chapter 1: Lying Witches, Wardens and Worse

Volcano

I'm skipping this whole paragraph because it just describes the scene in the show.

"Foolish child!" The snake monster says arrogantly, "I could swallow you whole!" He hisses at her, "Do not underestimate me, Gildersnake," She stands defiantly, pointing at him "-for I am the Good Witch Azura, warrior of peace!" She poses as wind blows her hair before dropping into a battle stance and holding her staff like a bazooka, the gemstone glowing orange. "Now eat this, sucka!" She fires off the staff, making a direct hit at the serpent. "No!" He screams out in pain before collapsing." My only weakness: dying!

You know, people make new lines for a new speaker for a reason. I know most people who read this fan fiction have already seen the Owl House so they know who's speaking. But for someone who has seen the first episode and can't remember it well, I have no idea what's going on. Besides that, I'm sure you can see the other glaring issue with this so-called "story of my own creation", it's a copy and paste of the first episode.

Principal's Office, Gravesfield High School, Gravesfield, Conneticut, USA, Earth
9:57 AM

The scene cuts to a doll of Azura and a green snake being held by a thin, tan-skinned teenage Dominican-American girl with golden-brown eyes, and dark brown hair in a slightly outgrown pixie cut. Her clothing consists of a set of small, round black earrings, a short-sleeved half-lavender-blue and half-white hooded shirt with cat ears attached to the hood, high-waisted jean shorts over a set of dark navy-gray capri leggings, and a pair of white loafer sneakers. "And that's the end." She proudly says.

She is currently in an office with a man with dark brown skin, curly gray hair and a mustache, and wearing a yellow shirt along with a woman next to him, a Dominican-American woman with tan skin, a medium body frame, and brown eyes, as well as brown eyebrows, her hair in a bun with two bangs tufted outward, wears a set of cyan scrubs with darker, blue-rimmed sleeves, white shoes, glasses with red and black frames, and blue earrings. "The end of what? The girl responds, "Our book report." The snake hisses and bites the doll. "I think we knocked it out of the park." "Your book report is why you two are in here." The man in the room says, gesturing to the door, through which two students can be seen outside running by screaming, snakes biting their heads.

Well, there is a slight difference, and that would be the introduction of "Tenebrae". Which means "dark" in Latin whilst "Luz" is "light". You know, if someone names their kid "Tenebrae" I would feel sorry for that kid. At least when Tales of Symphonia did it, Tenebrae is a spirit and not human. It doesn't help I was also told Tenebrae is one of those dark-edgy ocs.

Her eyes widen and turn back, "Oh. That's where the backup snakes were." The woman chimes in in with, "And what were you going to do with this?", holding up several firecrackers tied together in her hand. "That was for the Act Three closer." She tries to assure her, her expression saddening, "It was his idea." pointing to the seat next to her and finding no one there, as usual. "Mija," She says to her daughter, kneeling down. "I love your creativity, but it's gotten out of hand. Do you remember why you two were in the principal's office the last three times?"